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情景設(shè)定：學(xué)校運(yùn)動(dòng)全正在進(jìn)行之中。校廣播臺(tái)“榮辱廣角鏡”欄目小記者蕭鳴看到了下面兩組鏡頭。鏡頭一：男子接力比賽最后一棒，二班王強(qiáng)同學(xué)跌倒受傷，仍然堅(jiān)持跑到了終點(diǎn)。鏡頭二：賽場(chǎng)周圍，有部分同學(xué)說笑嬉鬧，還將剩余的飲食和廢棄物隨手亂扔。假設(shè)你是蕭鳴，請(qǐng)你從上面兩組鏡頭中任選一組，并根據(jù)其內(nèi)容為校廣播臺(tái)寫一篇80詞左右的短訊。

要求：1．確定并圍繞所選鏡頭進(jìn)行表達(dá)，短訊內(nèi)容應(yīng)給予情景想象和細(xì)節(jié)擴(kuò)展；

2．對(duì)所選的鏡頭要有個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，提出表揚(yáng)、倡議或批評(píng)、建議；

3．詞數(shù)80詞左右，開始語已給出(不計(jì)入詞數(shù))。

提示詞語：(鏡頭一)last lap, fall, hurt, get up, go on, shout, give up, highly,

(鏡頭二)out of, talk, laugh, waste, play, take part in, environment．

School sports meeting was still going on ________________________

Reported by Xiao Ming

Answer 1

答案：
解析：

　　Writing：(One possible version)

　　Scene one：It was the last lap of the boys' 100-metre race! All the runners were trying their best to run fast．Suddenly, Wang Qiang, the runner from Class 2, fell and hurt his leg．But he didn't give up．Instead, he got up and went on running to the

finishing line．All the teachers and students shouted "Come on!" to him and spoke

highly of him．

　　I think we should learn from Wang Qiang-Never give up, and try our best to do well in everything．(85 words)

　　Scene two：But out of the playground, a few of the students were talking and laughing loudly．Some students were even playing cards under the trees．It seemed that the sports meeting had nothing to do with them．Some food and drinks were not eaten or drunk up but wasted．Lots of litter could also be seen here and there．

　　I think everyone should take an active part in the sports meeting．It is also our duty to protect the environment around us．(80 words)

　　評(píng)分應(yīng)以鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生表達(dá)為原則。依據(jù)學(xué)生表達(dá)的內(nèi)容初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量確定，最后給分。

　　1、評(píng)分要點(diǎn)：

　　Scene one：①正在進(jìn)行的比賽；2分；

　�、谕鯊�(qiáng)跌倒受傷；2分；

　　③王強(qiáng)沒有放棄比賽；2分；

　�、儆^眾對(duì)王強(qiáng)行為的反應(yīng)；2分；

　　③作者觀點(diǎn)；2分。

　　Scene two：①賽場(chǎng)以外的地方；2分；

　　②少數(shù)同學(xué)的娘鬧行為；2分；

　　③浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象；2分；

　�、賮y扔垃圾現(xiàn)象；2分；

　�、葑髡哂^點(diǎn)；2分。

　　2．給分范圍和要求：

　　A檔：(10－12)80詞左右；緊扣主題；內(nèi)容充實(shí)；語言基本無誤；行文連貫；表達(dá)清楚。

　　B檔：(7～9)70詞左右；主題明確；內(nèi)容較充實(shí)；語言錯(cuò)誤不多；表達(dá)較清楚。

　　C檔：(4～6)60詞以下；主題明確；內(nèi)容單薄；語言錯(cuò)誤多；表達(dá)有欠缺。

　　D檔：(0～3)20詞以下；只能寫出少量語句；主題不明；內(nèi)容松散．