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3．Frank是九年級(jí)學(xué)生，迷上了手機(jī)游戲，假如你是他的朋友Tina，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下材料寫-份信給他，并給他適當(dāng)建議．
1、經(jīng)常玩手機(jī)游戲到深夜，睡眠不足．
2、白天困倦，上課不認(rèn)萁聽講，成績(jī)下降．
3、父母生氣，不再讓他使用手機(jī)，他感到很難過．
4、建議自擬，不少于二條． 要求：包含所給要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)言流暢，意思連貫，適當(dāng)拓展；詞數(shù)：不少于80詞，開頭和 結(jié)尾己給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名、地名、校名．
Dear Frank
I am sorry to hear that you have quarrelled with your parents about playing mobile phone gam es．Y ou often play mobile phone games till midnight so that you don't have enough time to sleep and you are too sleepy and tired to listen to the teachers in class the next day．You've become weak in your studies．Your parents get angry with you．They don't allow you to use your mobile phone．You are feeling bad about this．
I think your parents are right．You are now in Great 9．You should spend more time on your schoolwork．You should stop playing games．You can use your mobile phone to search for information，and look up new words．Also，you need to communicate with your parents and teachers，and let them know your problems．They will help you．

I hope my suggestions are of great value to you．
Yours
Tina．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是朋友迷上了手機(jī)游戲，要求寫信給朋友，給他提出建議．注意信件的格式．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第二人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1、經(jīng)常玩手機(jī)游戲到深夜，睡眠不足．
2、白天困倦，上課不認(rèn)真聽講，成績(jī)下降．
3、父母生氣，不再讓他使用手機(jī)，他感到很難過．
4、建議自擬，不少于二條
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
get angry with sb生某人的氣
allow sb to do sth允許某人做某事
spend+時(shí)間+on sth花時(shí)間做某事
stop doing sth停止做某事
look up 查找
communicate with sb與某人交流
search for 搜索
【高分句型】
1．You often play mobile phone games ①till midnight ②so that you don't ③have enough time to sleep and you are ④too sleepy and tired to listen to the teachers in class the next day．
①till 直到…
②so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句．
③have enough time to do sth有足夠時(shí)間做某事
④"too+形容詞/副詞+動(dòng)詞不定式"表示"太…而不能…"、"太…無法…"．
2．You can use your mobile phone ①to ②search for information，and ③look up new words．
①動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．
②search for 搜索
③look up 查找

解答 Dear Frank
I am sorry to hear that you have quarrelled with your parents about playing mobile phone games．
You often play mobile phone games till midnight so that you don't have enough time to sleep（經(jīng)常玩手機(jī)游戲到深夜，睡眠不足）and you are too sleepy and tired to listen to the teachers in class the next day．You've become weak in your studies．（白天困倦，上課不認(rèn)真聽講，成績(jī)下降）Your parents get angry with you．They don't allow you to use your mobile phone．You are feeling bad about this．（父母生氣，不再讓他使用手機(jī)，他感到很難過）
I think your parents are right．You are now in Great 9．You should spend more time on your schoolwork．You should stop playing games．You can use your mobile phone to search for information，and look up new words．【高分句型】
Also，you need to communicate with your parents and teachers，and let them know your problems．They will help you．（建議）
I hope my suggestions are of great value to you．
Yours
Tina

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