Question

【題目】.如今,國內(nèi)外很多孩子在父母的安排下沒有了自己的周末,如下圖中的Jack。請分析圖中的這種現(xiàn)象并談?wù)勀愕目捶?/span>,以 Weekend or Not?為題寫一篇約110詞的英語短文向 Parents雜志投稿,讓父母們通過閱讀你的文章能有所啟發(fā)。

注意:文中若出現(xiàn)“Jack"以外的人名或任何學(xué)校名稱,該作文得分不超過12分。

Weekend or Not?

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Answer 1

【答案】Weekend or Not?

Jack has to attend lots of classes at weekends. He has little time for his favorite sport-soccer. Still, his parents are pushing him to do more math exercises, which worries him a lot.

Nowadays, many students are under much pressure like Jack. Their parents believe it necessary for them to make full use of the weekends and learn as much as possible. As a result, some students are stressed out and therefore lose interest in learning anything. What is worse, they may not be able to learn to manage their own life.

I do hope all the children can have the freedom to choose what they like to do and enjoy their weekends.

【解析】寫作這篇文章需要寫一篇稿件，稿件的主題是討論當(dāng)下父母把兒童的周末都安排滿是否可行，寫作的目的是讓父母們通過閱讀你的文章能有所啟發(fā)。要注意的是寫作的時(shí)候不能脫離漫畫，不能脫離里面的任務(wù)Jack，看似是一篇議論題材的文章，但是要關(guān)注漫畫，簡單介紹漫畫中Jack的生活，通過Jack引出自己的觀點(diǎn)，討論這樣做的劣勢在哪里，最后最后表達(dá)出自己的期望，寫作要注意邏輯性，分段要合理。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：首段用幾句話簡單描述了漫畫，用到了一些較好的短語（attend lots of classes，has little time for…，pushing him to do，worries him a lot），這些短語運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，能使文章首段非常有吸引力。第二段描述了自己的觀點(diǎn)，使用了一些議論文常用的句式（…believe it necessary for … to…，As a result, What is worse,），文章末尾有自己的希望，清晰簡練地表達(dá)了自己的觀點(diǎn)�？傮w來說這篇文章分段清晰，每段功能準(zhǔn)確，表意明確，有一定的說理性，完成了既定的寫作任務(wù)。