Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)。根據(jù)下面的表格提示, 寫一篇題為“Changes in my home town”的英文短文。

過去	現(xiàn)在
小鎮(zhèn)舊房	新城高樓
小商店、沒有學(xué)校	一家大超市、一所現(xiàn)代化的學(xué)校
步行或騎自行車	乘公交車、有私家車
河水清澈	河水污染

要求：

1.所有提示都應(yīng)在短文中呈現(xiàn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，須對(duì)發(fā)生的變化談?wù)勛约旱母惺埽?/span>

2.詞數(shù)：80詞左右，開頭部分已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Changes in my hometown

Over the past few years, great changes have taken place in my hometown.

In the past, ________________________________________________

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_____________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】Changes in my hometown

As time goes by, great changes have taken place in my hometown.

In the past, there are many old houses. But now we have many high beautiful buildings. People used to live in the small and dirty rooms. But now they have moved into new flat, which is big and comfortable. People go to work by bus or by car instead of on foot or by bike. There is a river in my hometown. It used to be very dirty while it is clear now. Now wide road has taken the place of the narrow street. And cars on the road become more and more.

My hometown has become more and more beautiful. I love my hometown.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以Changes in my hometown為題，講述一下自己家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的變化。題目給了我們一個(gè)表格，顯示了家鄉(xiāng)過去和現(xiàn)在的變化。主要有以下幾個(gè)方面，一是人們居住條件的變化；二是人們上班的交通方式上的變化；三是居住環(huán)境的變化。我們要從這幾個(gè)方面，利用對(duì)比的方式，把家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的這些變化用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。因此我們要特別注意過去和現(xiàn)在的一個(gè)對(duì)比，我們可以使用一些短語，例如used to， instead of, in the past, now等。同時(shí)要注意使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，現(xiàn)在時(shí)和過去時(shí)混合使用。多使用好的句型句式，使文章表達(dá)連貫、流暢。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先這篇短文的結(jié)構(gòu)很清楚，分成了三段，第一段是開頭，點(diǎn)明主題；第二段是文章的中心，對(duì)比家鄉(xiāng)過去和現(xiàn)在的變化；第三段是一個(gè)總結(jié)和作者的感想。有頭有尾，層次分明。在文章的主體部分，作者主要使用了對(duì)比的方法，從題目中要求的幾個(gè)方面，把家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的變化描述了出來。并且特別注意了表達(dá)相似意思的時(shí)候，盡量不使用重復(fù)的句型。如說到過去的時(shí)候，用了in the past和used to；提到現(xiàn)在時(shí)，用了now。短文中時(shí)態(tài)、人稱使用準(zhǔn)確，用到了一般過去時(shí)、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。文章中好的句型有As time goes by, great changes have taken place in my hometown、they have moved into new flat, which is big and comfortable、People go to work by bus or by car instead of on foot or by bike等。