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16．假定上周六晚上，你們?nèi)�家在一家飯店就餐．�?qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示．用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文，描述事情發(fā)生的經(jīng)過(guò)，并適當(dāng)加以評(píng)論．
    要點(diǎn)提示：
    （1）鄰桌年輕人大聲說(shuō)笑、吸煙．
    （2）你請(qǐng)他們不要那樣做．
    （3）他們不聽(tīng)，反而嘲笑你．
    （4）你認(rèn)為：①他們?cè)诠�共�?chǎng)所那樣做是不對(duì)的．
              ②年輕人是天津的未來(lái)，應(yīng)該…
  參考詞匯：嘲笑laugh at
  要求：
    （1）詞數(shù)：80～100個(gè)．
    （2）短文開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
    （3）要點(diǎn)齊全，行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinnerin a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（評(píng)論和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇給材料作文．本文所給材料比較簡(jiǎn)略，故動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，根據(jù)材料組織內(nèi)容，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)．寫作中注意重點(diǎn)：1．介紹事情的發(fā)生經(jīng)過(guò)，2．對(duì)此評(píng)論，表達(dá)自己的看法．根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文在敘述事情經(jīng)過(guò)時(shí)，應(yīng)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)．表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，可用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．本文人稱較為復(fù)雜，注意時(shí)態(tài)語(yǔ)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題．寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)和句型although雖然，in my opinion依我看來(lái)，what's more更有甚者，full of充滿，try to do盡力去做…，refuse to do拒接去做…，laugh at嘲笑，be proud of以…為驕傲，pay attention to注意…，none of my business不關(guān)我的事等等

解答 答案：
（介紹事情的經(jīng)過(guò)）Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinner in a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．（高分句型）While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（評(píng)論和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．（高分句型）What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇書面表達(dá)應(yīng)根據(jù)提綱內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確描述事情并且表達(dá)自己的個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)．在描述事情時(shí)應(yīng)采用正確的時(shí)態(tài)．同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．溫馨提醒：必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．