Question

【題目】Zhou Hui和Ge Bin是“一幫一”活動(dòng)中結(jié)成的一對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)伙伴。 Zhou Hui在Ge Bin的幫助下有了明顯的進(jìn)步。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表信息寫一篇60字左右的短文。（開頭已寫出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）

Zhou Hui	In the past	didn’t listen carefully in his class ，like to play computer games every day
	Now	study hard get on well with his classmates
Ge Bin	Make Zhou Hui be interested in his study Help Zhou Hui with his study

We are very glad that Zhou Hui has made great progress __________________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

We are very glad that Zhou Hui has made great progress. But in the past he didn't listen carefully in class. He also liked to play computer games every day. Ge Bin is Zhou Hui's classmate and friend. He tried his best to make Zhou Hui be interested in his study and help him with his study after school. With his help， Zhou Hui studies very hard and gets on well with his classmates now.

【解析】

試題分析：這是篇提綱類作文，題目表格中已經(jīng)給出了具體的寫作內(nèi)容，而起給出了英文的表達(dá)方式。在寫作時(shí)，我們要做的就如何將這些短語(yǔ)，不完整的句子連接起來，使其成完整的句子，進(jìn)而成一篇完整的作文。在寫作時(shí)要注意句子的完整性，以及時(shí)態(tài)和人稱等問題�？傮w來說，這篇作文的難度相對(duì)比較小。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇作文將題中所給的要點(diǎn)完整地組織在一起，句子完整準(zhǔn)確，表達(dá)流暢。文章不是生硬的按照題中順序?qū)⒏鞑糠纸M成，而是按照“過去的情況——葛斌的幫助——現(xiàn)在的情況”，使結(jié)構(gòu)更清晰。 文中增加了一些連詞和承接句，使各句子聯(lián)系更加緊密，如But但是；also也；With his help有了他的幫助。