Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)(（本題共有1小題， 共計(jì)20分）

每個(gè)人的成長都是一種蛻變的過程，從幼稚走向成熟，從逆境走向成功,請你回憶一下你在成長過程中所經(jīng)歷的一次蛻變，把它寫出來與我們一起分享，好嗎？要求短文內(nèi)容包含以下信息：1.變化前后分別是什么樣子的？

2.促成你轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因是什么？

3.你為此變化而付出了怎樣的努力？

4.談?wù)勀阕兓�后的感受�?/span>

提示：1.字?jǐn)?shù)要求在80-100詞左右

2.短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和校名等信息

3.開頭已給出不計(jì)入總數(shù)。

makes me change

I used to be

Answer 1

【答案】

My mother’s diary makes me change

I used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me. Now I’d like to say I’ve changed a lot. In fact, it is because of my mother’s diaries.

One day I saw my mother’s diary book by accident while I was looking for my notebook. I was curious and began to read my mother’s diaries. In her diaries, she showed her deep love for me. She also expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes. She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy. I couldn’t help crying after reading my mother’s diaries. Since that day, I have changed a lot. I work hard and share some housework. I also try to understand my mother’s feelings.

I feel very proud of myself whenever I see the smile on my mother’s face.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。主要寫其變化前后的樣子、促成其轉(zhuǎn)變的主要原因和其為此變化付出的努力。寫過去用一般過去時(shí)，轉(zhuǎn)變后的現(xiàn)在用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。溫馨提醒：考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

亮點(diǎn)說明：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊 文中使用了非常好的短詞為文章增色不少，首先是look for, try to do , see the smile on my mother’s face.等固定詞組，其次還運(yùn)用了she showed her deep love for me. She also expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes.這些重點(diǎn)句型的運(yùn)用給文章增色不少。