Question

假如你是一名九年級(jí)學(xué)生李斌，最近你覺得學(xué)習(xí)壓力大，與父母關(guān)系不融洽，孩提時(shí)代的快樂不復(fù)存在。對(duì)此，你很苦惱。你要寫一封信給青少年專家Sigmund Friend，告訴他你遇到的問題，并請(qǐng)求幫助。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列表格中所列的信息，寫完這封信。

In the past	now
go shopping with parents	have too much homework to do
play with friends outside	get bad grades in exams
read interesting books	argue with parents
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注意： ⑴文章必須包括表中所給的信息，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，注意行文流暢；

   ⑵文章開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

   ⑶詞數(shù)80個(gè)字左右。

Dear Sigmund Friend,

My name is Li Bin. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I’m unhappy these days.________________________________________________________________________________________

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Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.

Best wishes!

Yours,

                                                                    Li Bin

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear Sigmund Friend,

My name is Li Bin. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I’m unhappy these days. I have too much homework to do. What’s more, I always get bad grades in exams, though I work really hard. I think I’m under great pressure. Thirdly, my parents don’t allow me to play outside and I often argue with them. I’m not allowed to play computer games at home, either. I feel sad. Things are different in the past. I used to go shopping with parents on weekends. And I could play with my friends in the open air. We enjoyed ourselves. Every night, I read interesting books. I love reading. What’s more, I used to visit somewhere quiet and beautiful on holidays with my family. I miss those happy moments.

Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.

Best wishes!

Yours,

                                                                    Li Bin

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將自己的煩惱介紹清澈。根據(jù)材料可知，本文涉及過(guò)去和現(xiàn)在兩種時(shí)態(tài)的運(yùn)用，寫作中主語(yǔ)時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，做到語(yǔ)句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式，如：too……to太……而不能；used to過(guò)去常常做某事；enjoyonself，玩得很高興；what’s more而且，等句式。作者并且在寫作中巧妙的使用了連詞，序數(shù)詞，使得本文看起來(lái)邏輯清楚，條理分明。所以在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.

考點(diǎn)：考查提綱類作文