Question

13．最近你校進(jìn)行了一次"說(shuō)出你的煩惱（Speak out your worries）的調(diào)查活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容和提示要求寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，匯報(bào)調(diào)查結(jié)果并向老師和父母提出建議．
注意：1．詞數(shù)80左右；2．不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個(gè)人信息

學(xué)生比例	煩惱	你的建議
50%	作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大	？
30%	父母不理解，缺乏交流
20%	活動(dòng)少，體質(zhì)差

Our school has made a survey---"Speak out your worries"．Here are the results．About fifty percent of the students in our school are worried about their homework．They have so much homework to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．They feel stressed very much．About thirty percent of the students think their parents can't understand them and are too strict with them （in their studies）．It's difficult for them to get along/on well with their parents．The other twenty percent of them say they are weak in health．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．
Dear teachers，would you please give us less homework and more time to relax ourselves？Dear mom and dad，we will try/do our best to improve our studies and we want to take more exercise to stay healthy as well．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是匯報(bào)說(shuō)出你的煩惱（Speak out your worries）的調(diào)查結(jié)果并向老師和父母提出建議．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1.50% 作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大
2.30% 父母不理解，缺乏交流
3.20% 活動(dòng)少，體質(zhì)差
4．提出建議
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
be worried about  擔(dān)心…
be weak in在某方面薄弱
be strict with sb"對(duì)某人嚴(yán)厲"；
get along well with"和某人合得來(lái)"；
try one's best to do sth"盡某人最大努力做某事
【高分句型】
1．They have ①so much homework②to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．
①so…that，如此…以至于…，that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句．
②動(dòng)詞不定式做后置定語(yǔ)，修飾homework．
2．①It's difficult for them to ②get along/on well with their parents．
①it is+adj+for sb+to do sth對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)做某事是怎么樣的，it是形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式做真正主語(yǔ)．
②get along well with"和某人合得來(lái)"；
3．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．
that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為complain的賓語(yǔ)．

解答 Our school has made a survey-"Speak out your worries"．Here are the results．
About fifty percent of the students in our school are worried about their homework．They have so much homework to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．【高分句型】They feel stressed very much．（50% 作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大）About thirty percent of the students think their parents can't understand them and are too strict with them （in their studies）．It's difficult for them to get along/on well with their parents．（30% 父母不理解，缺乏交流 ）【高分句型】The other twenty percent of them say they are weak in health．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．（20% 活動(dòng)少，體質(zhì)差）【高分句型】
Dear teachers，would you please give us less homework and more time to relax ourselves？Dear mom and dad，we will try/do our best to improve our studies and we want to take more exercise to stay healthy as well．（提出建議）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇圖表作文．要求同學(xué)們根據(jù)圖表內(nèi)容寫一份調(diào)查結(jié)果匯報(bào)，要將表格內(nèi)容表述全面并根據(jù)調(diào)查結(jié)果寫出你的建議．動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)態(tài)語(yǔ)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題．寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少．如：be strict with sb"對(duì)某人嚴(yán)厲"；get along well with"和某人合得來(lái)"；try one's best to do sth"盡某人最大努力做某事"等等．在平時(shí)學(xué)習(xí)中牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理．