Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)。

同學(xué)們，從小到大，會(huì)有很多不同的人物伴隨著你成長(zhǎng)，他們可能是你的家人、老師、朋友、同學(xué)……甚至是路人。他們或許對(duì)你產(chǎn)生了重要影響，進(jìn)而給你留下深刻印象。請(qǐng)以 “A person who impressed me a lot” 為題寫一篇英語(yǔ)作文，描述一位給你留下深刻印象的人物。

要求：1. 結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言流利。

2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的學(xué)校，姓名等個(gè)人信息。

3. 80詞左右。

A person who impressed me a lot

Answer 1

【答案】There were so many people in our memory. Some went lost while some impressed us deeply. Now, I want to introduce the one who impressed me a lot.

Five years ago, I was a primary school student. My family had to move to another city because of my father’s work. I was sent to a new and strange school. I was not an outgoing girl, so it was not easy for me to make new friends. When I felt lonely and sad, a little girl in a red dress came to me. She asked me if I needed any help in a soft and beautiful voice. I was surprised but happy. We became good friends and our friendship has lasted till now. The time I spent with her was the best hours in my life.

I believe she will be my friend throughout my life.

【解析】

本文屬于話題作文，描述一位給你留下深刻印象的人物。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如because of，be sent to, it is adj for sb to do sth, make friends, in a red dress, last, till now以及spend with等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。