Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)：（本題15分）

我們生活在同一藍(lán)天下，但現(xiàn)在中國(guó)的霧霾天氣越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重�，F(xiàn)在請(qǐng)你以一個(gè)中學(xué)生的角度寫(xiě)一篇短文，內(nèi)容包括：1、簡(jiǎn)單介紹霧霾的形成2、對(duì)人們身體和生活上的危害（如導(dǎo)致人們尤其是小孩和老人呼吸問(wèn)題，也許會(huì)導(dǎo)致癌癥，由于霧霾也發(fā)生了許多的交通事故，等等）3、如何治理霧霾發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)。

要求：1、不能照抄信息歸納的內(nèi)容；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實(shí)的名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名；

2、語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80左右。

Answer 1

【答案】

In recent years, people’s living condition has improved a lot. But the smog has become more and more seriously. The smog is caused by the factory, and more and more people have personal cars. The smog has done great harm to our daily life. many traffic accidents happened just because of the heavy smog weather, a great number of people have to go to see the doctor because the serious disease caused by the smog, quite a lot of flights have to be put off.

The earth is our home, we should protect the environment. According to me, I will go to school by bike or on foot, and I won’t throw the waste anywhere. What’s more, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can. Would you like to tell me some good idea?

Let try our best to protect our home and make it more and more beautiful.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)所給信息，來(lái)寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于霧霾的短文。題目中有關(guān)霧霾的具體信息，我們應(yīng)用正確的英語(yǔ)將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，我們可以根據(jù)需要將這些信息進(jìn)行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思銜接更自然。當(dāng)然我們要盡量使用一些好的句型和連詞，使文章上下文意思連貫，更出彩。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者按照題目的要求，給我們介紹了霧霾的形成及危害，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。而且作者在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，并不是完全按照題目中給出的順序，逐句翻譯的，而是將這些信息進(jìn)行了整合，讓意思關(guān)聯(lián)緊密的放在一起表達(dá)，這一點(diǎn)很好。短文中的語(yǔ)言合乎英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)規(guī)范，而且作者還使用了一些較好的句式，增強(qiáng)了文章的連貫性。如What’s more, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can；Let try our best to protect our home and make it more and more beautiful等。