Question

書面表達(dá)（本大題有1小題，共15分）
近來，一系列事情的發(fā)生使得Li Ming 開心不起來。你作為他的朋友想幫幫他。你可以選取下列Li Ming 所發(fā)生事件的其中一件，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象，寫一篇60-80詞的小短文，發(fā)表自己的看法。開頭已寫出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
⑴最近，Li Ming 喜歡上了打電腦游戲，常常熬夜，導(dǎo)致第二天顯得疲倦，學(xué)習(xí)不認(rèn)真；
⑵Li Ming的英語一直不是很好，上星期的英語考試又不及格。
⑶Li Ming 的媽媽給他制定了嚴(yán)格的家規(guī)：不許熬夜，不許打電腦游戲，周末不許外出，晚上必須呆在家里等。
     I’m Wang Tao. Let me help you. …                                       
                                                                            
                                                                            
                                                                            
                                                                           

Answer 1

I’m Wang Tao. Let me help you. Maybe every teenager likes playing computer games, but we shouldn’t play computer games too much. You’d better not stay up too late. You need to have enough sleeping time, so you can be energetic enough to study tomorrow. And you should concentrate more on your study because you are still a student. It’s our duty to study well. I hope you will be good at your study again soon.                                                                    
                                                                            
Another possible version:
   I’m Wang Tao. Let me help you.  First of all, please don’t worry your English too much. I think you failed the English test just because you played computer games too much and you stayed up too late. Don't do that again. If you can pay more attention on English,, you will get better grades soon. After all, your English was not bad before.     I hope you can get up early and do morning reading every day. Listen to the teacher carefully and make grammar notes. Also, do homework carefully , so you can make fewer mistakes. Believe yourself !                                  

試題分析：本文的寫作可以選取一個(gè)話題進(jìn)行闡述。首先對(duì)出現(xiàn)的問題進(jìn)行說明，引出所要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容，然后對(duì)于這一項(xiàng)現(xiàn)象提出自己合理的建議，對(duì)這一部分需要重點(diǎn)的說明，可以從三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行表達(dá)，對(duì)所提的表達(dá)之間注意使用合適的連詞來表達(dá)更為準(zhǔn)確的意思，是文章富于變化和條理。最后表達(dá)對(duì)他的希望或是祝福。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：初中英語的作文，著重考察學(xué)生連詞成句的能力，要在“準(zhǔn)”字上下功夫。在寫作中注意人稱與謂語動(dòng)詞的數(shù)關(guān)系和動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)等諸多方面。對(duì)于中考的作文，盡量將所學(xué)的知識(shí)運(yùn)用到作文中，寫出富于變化、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊的文章，不要出現(xiàn)中式英文。在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中，注意多背誦范文，對(duì)于寫的好的句子進(jìn)行默寫，考試時(shí)就能寫出準(zhǔn)確地道的作文。