Question

假如你在網(wǎng)上建了一個(gè)英文博客，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的提示內(nèi)容，發(fā)表一篇80詞左右的日記。
你在電視上看到你過去的同學(xué)李英在英語演講比賽上獲得了一等獎(jiǎng)。你不禁回憶起以前的她，她過去是一個(gè)很害羞的女孩,……。幾年未見,她真的發(fā)生了很大的變化。你為她而感到驕傲和高興。由此你想到自己的生活也應(yīng)有所變化。
要求：80詞左右，日記的開頭已給出。
參考詞匯及短語： to one’s surprise; used to; change; be afraid to; no longer; take pride in; be confident in (對(duì)……有信心)
Wednesday   August 22                               Sunny
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Wednesday   August 22                            Sunny
Today I was surprised to see my old classmate, Li Ying, on TV. She finished in first place in an English speech contest. She has changed a lot. She used to be very shy and quiet. She was afraid to speak in front of others, but now she is no longer that shy girl. She is so outgoing. Her speech was very interesting and very well done. I really take pride in her success. People sure change over time. People should be confident in themselves. I want to try my best to improve myself too.

試題分析：本文的寫作不難，首先對(duì)李英的獲得了英語演講比賽的情況進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單說明She finished in first place in an English speech contest.然后對(duì)她過去的性格，行為進(jìn)行描述，進(jìn)而與現(xiàn)在的情況進(jìn)行對(duì)比，如She used to be very shy and quiet. She was afraid to speak in front of others,最后陳述只要相信自己，人肯定是可以通過努力改變的，表明我也要盡最大努力來提升自己I want to try my best to improve myself too.來與主題相呼應(yīng)。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：初中英語的作文，著重考察學(xué)生連詞成句的能力，要在“準(zhǔn)”字上下功夫。在寫作中注意人稱與謂語動(dòng)詞的數(shù)關(guān)系和動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)等諸多方面。在對(duì)所出現(xiàn)的問題或是采取的措施描寫中注意使用連詞或是好的句式如have a  far-reaching effect on sth對(duì)…有深遠(yuǎn)的影響，only 置于句首的倒裝及only when …,can we…等。對(duì)于中學(xué)作文的寫作，盡量將所學(xué)的知識(shí)運(yùn)用到作文中，寫出富于變化、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊的文章，不要出現(xiàn)中式英文。在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中，注意多背誦范文，對(duì)于寫的好的句子進(jìn)行默寫，考試時(shí)就能寫出準(zhǔn)確地道的作文。