Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)(10分)
根據(jù)以下提示，寫(xiě)一篇80字左右的短文。
Lisa是印度一個(gè)貧困家庭的孩子。
過(guò)去她們家很窮，她沒(méi)錢(qián)上學(xué)，只好整天在農(nóng)場(chǎng)干活，既不會(huì)讀也不會(huì)寫(xiě)。
她多么希望她能上學(xué)！有一天，一位UNCIFE的工作人員來(lái)到她的村莊，了解了她的情況 后，給她提供了上學(xué)的錢(qián)。
Lisa現(xiàn)在在校讀書(shū)，現(xiàn)在既會(huì)讀也會(huì)寫(xiě)了，長(zhǎng)大后也想成為一位UNICEF的工作人員，幫助更多貧困的孩子。

Answer 1

One possible version：
Lisa is an Indian poor child. They were very poor in the past, and she had no money to go to school. So she had to work on the farm all day, she could neither read nor write. She wished she could go to school! One day , a staff of the UNCIFE came to her village. After learning about her condition, the staff gave her money and afforded her to go to school. Now Lisa studies at school, and she can read and write. She wants to be a staff of theUNCIFE when she grows up, and help more poor children.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹Lisa在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下會(huì)讀也會(huì)寫(xiě)的故事。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)為第一，三人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：Lisa is......；They were.....； she had to ......； the staff gave......；She wants to...... 等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要把提綱的內(nèi)容表達(dá)完整。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了Lisa的過(guò)去，接下來(lái)介紹在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下，她能去上學(xué)，最后指出她希望長(zhǎng)大后，幫助更多的貧窮孩子。此處用了 in the past，all day, learning about，afforded her to ，wants to 等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。