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7．隨著電子商務(wù)的發(fā)展，網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物已經(jīng)越來(lái)越流行了，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示詞，描述一下你第一次網(wǎng)購(gòu)的經(jīng)歷．
要點(diǎn)與參考詞匯：want to buy a book，excited，pay money，wait for a long time，broken，sad，call the seller，change，honest，at last，learn
寫(xiě)作要求：1．內(nèi)容必須包括上面提示的要點(diǎn)，并可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
2．文章結(jié)構(gòu)合理，條理清晰，語(yǔ)句連貫、行文流暢．
3．詞數(shù)：80詞左右．短文開(kāi)頭已給出，你可以選擇使用，或者自己從頭開(kāi)始寫(xiě)．（如選用開(kāi)頭，請(qǐng)接著從下一行開(kāi)始寫(xiě)，開(kāi)頭不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．如不選用開(kāi)頭，請(qǐng)空兩行，自己從頭開(kāi)始寫(xiě)）

It is really convenient to shop online because of the development of the e-business．I still remember the experience that I shopped on taobao for the first time．I could find the book that I wanted in the bookstore．So I decided to buy a book online．I felt a little excited because it was my first time．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．
When the book arrived，it was broken．I felt really angry and called the seller．The seller agreed to change anther book for me．I learn that being honest is important in online shopping．At last I got the new book and felt happy．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是描述一下你第一次網(wǎng)購(gòu)的經(jīng)歷．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．網(wǎng)購(gòu)的經(jīng)歷
2．我的感受
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
want to do sth 想要做某事
decide to do sth 決定去做某事
wait for等…
fell+adj感覺(jué)怎樣
agree to do sth贊同做某事
高分句型：
1．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．
after paying money online是個(gè)省略句，after用作介詞，意為在…之后，表達(dá)的意義是after I paid money online，從句主語(yǔ)和主句的主語(yǔ)一致，從句中的主語(yǔ)可以省略．a(chǎn)fter后跟動(dòng)名詞．
2．I learn①that②being honest is important in online shopping．
①that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為learn的賓語(yǔ)．
②being honest動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)is．

解答 It is really convenient to shop online because of the development of the e-business．I still remember the experience that I shopped on taobao for the first time．（點(diǎn)題，引出下文）
I could find the book that I wanted in the bookstore．So I decided to buy a book online．I felt a little excited because it was my first time．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．（高分句型）
When the book arrived，it was broken．I felt really angry and called the seller．The seller agreed to change anther book for me．At last I got the new book and felt happy．（經(jīng)歷））I learn that being honest is important in online shopping．（高分句型）（感受）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇給材料作文，短文的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出．寫(xiě)作時(shí)先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來(lái)，并且要有適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在談到自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，要結(jié)合活動(dòng)內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)出自己的觀點(diǎn)．