Question

假如你是李華，寒假即將到來，你打算度過一個怎么樣的假期呢？請你根據(jù)提示，以“A Meaningful Vacation (一個有意義的假期)”為題，寫一篇小短文。
提示：1. 學(xué)習(xí)方面：What will you do about study?
2. 健康方面：What about your health? Will you exercise?
3. 生活方面：What will you help do at home?
要求：1. 必須包括所有提示內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名及相關(guān)信息；
3. 字?jǐn)?shù)：60~80 (開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))。
A Meaningful Vacation
The winter vacation is coming soon. _____________________________________________             
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Answer 1

A Meaningful Vacation
The winter vacation is coming soon. We’ll have a one-month holiday. After learning at school for a long term, I’m going to do something during the vacation. To have a meaningful vacation, I’m going to do the following things:
First, I will finish doing my homework on time and preview the new lessons. As a student, I think study should come first. Second, I will do some sports, such as skating, playing football and so on. If I want to study well, I must have a healthy body. Third, I am going to help at home. It’s not easy for my parents to look after me, so I am going to help them do some housework, like cleaning the floor, doing the dishes and so on.
I believe I will have a meaningful vacation.

試題分析：這篇短文是一篇命題作文，題目為a meaningful vacation ，一個有意義的假期，在這篇短文中要表達(dá)一下自己假期的安排，文章主要包括三個方面，即學(xué)習(xí)方面、健康方面和生活方面，要用自己的話把這三方面的安排表達(dá)清楚，不能遺漏一條。通過分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)主要使用第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時來表達(dá)。同時可以有適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，以使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)。表達(dá)時還要注意使用正確的連接詞，使文章表達(dá)連貫、流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇范文書寫規(guī)范，內(nèi)容完整，層次分明。短文分成了三段，第一段先點(diǎn)明了主題，要放假了，要過一個有意義的假期；第二段是中心段，具體表達(dá)了假期的安排，有first、 second 、third將三方面的內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來；第三段是一個總結(jié)段，再次點(diǎn)明主題，即要過一個有意義的假期。短文中使用了一些較好的句型和短語，如After learning at school for a long term, I’m going to do something during the vacation、I will finish doing my homework on time and preview the new lessons、I will do some sports, such as skating,、It’s not easy for my parents to look after me, so I am going to help them do some housework, like cleaning the floor, doing the dishes and so on playing football and so on等。