Question

假如你是李明，最近，你的朋友張華因上學(xué)期考試不利，學(xué)習(xí)消極應(yīng)付。請你用英語給他寫一封e-mail,指出其消極行為可能帶來的不良后果，并結(jié)合自身實際，提出新學(xué)期應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對方法，鼓勵他努力學(xué)習(xí)。詞數(shù)：80-100
Dear Zhang Hua,
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Yours
Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear Zhang Hua,
I’m sorry to hear that you didn’t do well in your last exam..You are not the only one who seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams.Quite a few students feel the same way as you. They lose their confident and don’t want to study hard any longer. I am sure you know that it is not good to do so .If so ,you may fall behind others.
I was once in the same situation as you .Falilure is the mother of success.When you face failure,what we need to do is to calm down and correct our leaning methods or ask the teacher for help.Anyway,Rome is not built in a day .we should make progress step by step.In the end , we will succeed.
I hope what I have said is helpful to you. Yours
Li Ming

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。本文所給材料比較詳細，一共兩個方面。一要指出其消極行為可能帶來的不良后果。二要結(jié)合自身實際，提出新學(xué)期應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對方法，鼓勵他努力學(xué)習(xí)。
主語主要用第一人稱，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時和過去時為主。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點說明】篇短文使用了大量的復(fù)合句，固定句式，為文章增色不少。如: 定語從句You are not the only one who seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams. the same …as,像···一樣。not…any longer.不再，等。同時合理運用諺語：Falilure is the mother of success.，Rome is not built in a day。這使文章更生動，使內(nèi)容更豐富。