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13．讀了《郭明義的極致幸福》后，你的感受如何？那你的幸福觀又是什么呢？請以What Is My Happiness？為題寫一篇短文．
內(nèi)容包括：
1．你心中的幸福是什么？
2．描述一件令你感到幸�？鞓返氖拢ㄐ杞淮鷷r(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、過程與感受）．
3．你認(rèn)為應(yīng)該如何創(chuàng)造幸福（至少兩點(diǎn)）．
要求：
1．短文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，意思連貫，語言流暢，語法準(zhǔn)確，符合邏輯；
2．卷面要求干凈整潔，不能涂改，更不能用涂改液；
3．詞數(shù)80左右．
4．開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
What Is My Happiness？
After reading"Guo Mingyi's ultimate happiness"，I am deeply moved by his view on happiness．As for me，happiness ishelping people in need．
Last Sunday，on my way home，I saw an old woman sat at the roadside．She looked very tired．I came to her and asked if she was OK．She said she had a headache and she couldn't move．I called 120 and sent her to hospital．When I was waiting outside，her families arrived and thanked me again and again．I felt so happy that I could help someone．
To create happiness，first of all，you should know what is happiness for you．Then，the most important thing is your action．Hope you can find your happiness．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以What Is My Happiness？為題談?wù)勀愕男腋Ｓ^．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱輔以第三人稱和第二人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．你心中的幸福是什么？
2．描述一件令你感到幸�？鞓返氖拢ㄐ杞淮鷷r(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、過程與感受）．
3．你認(rèn)為應(yīng)該如何創(chuàng)造幸福（至少兩點(diǎn)）．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
in need在危急中
on one's way to sp．在去某地的路上
sent sb to sp送某人去某地
again and again一次又一次
first of all 首先

高分句型：
1．I felt so happy that I could help someone．
so…that，表示如此以至于，so是副詞，中間加上形容詞或副詞，這里是加上形容詞happy，that引導(dǎo)的是結(jié)果狀語從句．
2．①To create happiness，②first of all，you should know ②what is happiness for you．
①動(dòng)詞不定式To create happiness作為目的狀語，表示為了創(chuàng)造幸福．
②first of all 首先
③what is happiness for you．作為know的賓語從句．

解答 What Is My Happiness？
   After reading"Guo Mingyi's ultimate happiness"，I am deeply moved by his view on happiness．As for me，happiness is helping people in need．（幸福是什么）
   Last Sunday，on my way home，I saw  an old woman sat at the roadside．She looked very tired．I came to her and asked if she was OK．She said she had a headache and she couldn't move．I called 120 and sent her to hospital．When I was waiting  outside，her families arrived and thanked me again and again．I felt so happy that I could help someone．（高分句型）（一件令你感到幸�？鞓返氖拢�
   To create happiness，first of all，you should know what is happiness for you．（高分句型）Then，the most important thing is your action．Hope you can find your happiness．（如何創(chuàng)造幸福）

點(diǎn)評 本文是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經(jīng)給出．寫作時(shí)先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來，并且要有適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在談到自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，要結(jié)合活動(dòng)內(nèi)容，寫出自己的觀點(diǎn)．