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【題目】請以“My best friend”為題，根據(jù)下列要點提示寫一篇作文：
1)、Daniel, 13歲，陽光中學(xué)七年級一班。
2)、戴著眼鏡，個子不高。今天他穿了一件白色的T-恤和一條藍(lán)色的牛仔褲，看起來很干凈。
3)、經(jīng)常做運動，很少吃漢堡和喝可樂。
4)、對畫畫很感興趣。沒有很多時間玩電腦游戲。
5)、他家附近有一個購物中心，他經(jīng)常周末在那里購物。他認(rèn)為那是一個購物的好地方。
6)、最喜歡春節(jié)，家人團(tuán)聚，享用美餐，非常幸福。
注意：1.詞數(shù)100詞左右。2.短文須包括所有要點內(nèi)容，不要逐詞翻譯，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使短文連貫通順。
My best friend

Answer 1

【答案】My best friend

My best friend is Daniel. He is 13 years old. He studies in Sunshine Middle School. He is in Class 1, Grade 7. He is short and wears glasses. He is wearing a white T-shirt and a pair of blue jeans today. He looks smart. He has a healthy lifestyle. He often exercises and he seldom has hamburgers and coke. He thinks they are bad for his health. He is interested in drawing. And he likes playing computer games too. As a student, he is busy with his study. So he doesn't have much time to play computer games. There is a shopping mall near his home. He often goes shopping there. And he thinks it's a good place to buy things.

【解析】這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的題目結(jié)合提示內(nèi)容完成這篇介紹好朋友的作文。寫作中要包含介紹朋友的幾個方面：姓名、年齡、就讀學(xué)校班級和外貌、性格及愛好，今天的穿著等進(jìn)行陳述，表達(dá)出朋友的與眾不同的特點等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱主要是第三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫作亮點：這篇短文全面、詳盡地闡明了朋友的各項基本信息，并包含了文中所要求的全部內(nèi)容。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，包含形容詞的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如He looks smart. He has a healthy lifestyle.，are bad for，play computer games，go shopping，文中對于名詞的使用準(zhǔn)確恰當(dāng)，如wearing a white T-shirt and a pair of blue jeans，have much time學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié)、牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。