Question

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother.______
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Answer 1

My mother
We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother. The person I love most is my mother. My mother is 41 years old. She is of medium build with long black hair. She is quiet. She is a history teacher in a middle school. She likes dancing. She can cook delicious food.
She did a lot for me when I was a child. She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money. She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend. She cooked delicious and healthy food for me.
When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy. I will find a good job after I graduate from college. I’ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young. I’ll take her to wonderful sights around China. Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。根據(jù)提綱內(nèi)容可知，本文可分三段來(lái)寫(xiě)，第一段對(duì)人物的介紹主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，主語(yǔ)是第三人稱，第二段用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，第三段用一般將來(lái)時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如of medium build with long black hair、from piano lessons to dancing lessons，狀語(yǔ)從句When I grow up、when I was a child 、even though she didn’t have much money和after I graduate from college，賓語(yǔ)從句whatever I needed for my study和 what I can to make my mother happy，定語(yǔ)從句The person I love most is my mother和that make her look still young，表語(yǔ)從句what she wants most， 文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。