Question

書面表達(dá)（20%）【2013蘇州】

初中生在成長的過程中總會碰到一些煩惱。就這一話題你班正積極籌備召開一次主題班會。請根據(jù)以下所列舉的幾項煩惱，用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，并對這些煩惱逐一提出你的建議。

    1．不被人理解，朋友少；

    2．作業(yè)多，沒有時間從事業(yè)余愛好；

    3．父母給的零花錢不夠用。

    注意：1．文章開頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；

      2．詞數(shù)90左右。

Dear classmates,

We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up.

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That's all. Thank you!

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear classmates,

We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up. Some students think they are misunderstood by others and have few friends. I think if we can care more about others than ourselves, we can have more friends. Some students find too much homework makes them have no time for their hobbies. If so, I think they should plan their time in a wise way and make a list of what they need to do first. Others complain that their parents don’t give them enough pocket money. In my opnion, it is not a problem. We should learn to save money. Do you agree with me?

That's all. Thank you!

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，注意文章文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。溫馨提醒：考生必須認(rèn)真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等。

【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如. there are m We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up ；I think if we can care more about others than ourselves, we can have more friends.還運用了if，while，that引導(dǎo)的從句；并注意了句子的銜接如：If so；In my opnion,等等。層次分明，表達(dá)流暢。

考點：提綱作文。