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6．在提倡和諧的社會(huì) 里，我們?cè)趺礃硬拍艹蔀橐幻?講文明，禮貌，守紀(jì)律"的中學(xué)生？請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的提示，以"How to Be a Cool Student？"為題寫(xiě)一篇詞數(shù)80詞左右的短文．
提示：1．家庭表現(xiàn)：愛(ài)父母，幫助父母做一些力所能及的家務(wù)等．
2．學(xué)校表現(xiàn)：遵守校規(guī)，與同學(xué)友好相處．
3．公共場(chǎng)合表現(xiàn)：勿大聲喧嘩，坐公車(chē)時(shí)應(yīng)主動(dòng)讓位給老人等．
要求：文章必須包括所給提示中1-3項(xiàng)的內(nèi)容，可展開(kāi)思路，自由地適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．文章中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名，校名和其他真實(shí)信息．
How to Be a Good Student？
As a student．it′s necessary and important to behave well．
When we come back home from school，we should try our best to help our parents．When we are at school，we should get on well with our schoolmates and teachers．We should also help each other．We should follow the school rules，too．In public，we should be ready to help others who are in trouble．We′d better not talk or laugh loudly．When we are on a bus，we should offer our seats to the old and the women with babies．
In a word，wherever we are，we should behave well to be good students．If we do，our society will be better and better．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"How to Be a Cool Student？"為題談?wù)勎覀冊(cè)趺礃硬拍艹蔀橐幻?講文明，禮貌，守紀(jì)律"的中學(xué)生．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．家庭表現(xiàn)：愛(ài)父母，幫助父母做一些力所能及的家務(wù)等．
2．學(xué)校表現(xiàn)：遵守校規(guī)，與同學(xué)友好相處．
3．公共場(chǎng)合表現(xiàn)：勿大聲喧嘩，坐公車(chē)時(shí)應(yīng)主動(dòng)讓位給老人等．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
get on with sb 與某人相處
be ready to do sth 樂(lè)于做某事
had better do sth 最好做某事
in a word 總之
比較級(jí)+and+比較級(jí)  越來(lái)越…
【高分句型】
1．①When we come back home from school，we should ②try our best to help our parents．
①when所引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句
②try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
2．In public，we should ①be ready to help others ②who are in trouble．
①be ready to do sth 樂(lè)于做某事
②who作為關(guān)系詞的定語(yǔ)從句，who作為主語(yǔ)，修飾先行詞others．in trouble 處于困境
3．①I(mǎi)f we do，our society will be ②better and better．
①if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，遵循主將從現(xiàn)的規(guī)則．
②比較級(jí)+and+比較級(jí)  越來(lái)越…

解答 How to Be a Good Student？
As a student．it′s necessary and important to behave well．
When we come back home from school，we should try our best to help our parents．【高分句型】
（家庭表現(xiàn)） When we are at school，we should get on well with our schoolmates and teachers．We should also help each other．We should follow the school rules，too．（學(xué)校表現(xiàn)）In public，we should be ready to help others who are in trouble．【高分句型】We′d better not talk or laugh loudly．When we are on a bus，we should offer our seats to the old and the women with babies．（公共場(chǎng)合表現(xiàn)）
In a word，wherever we are，we should behave well to be good students．If we do，our society will be better and better．【高分句型】（總結(jié)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題要求以"How to Be a Cool Student？"為題，就怎樣成為一名"講文明，禮貌，守紀(jì)律"的中學(xué)生寫(xiě)一篇短文．短文可以從"在家庭的表現(xiàn)"、"在學(xué)校的表現(xiàn)"、"在公共場(chǎng)合的表現(xiàn)"幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)講述．短文用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，可以用when引出的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，if引出的條件狀語(yǔ)從句等等來(lái)設(shè)置不同的情境來(lái)談?wù)撊藗兊男袨橐?guī)范．要注意語(yǔ)言的選擇及句型的運(yùn)用．要做到主題鮮明，思想積極向上．短文開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，直奔主題：行為規(guī)范、舉止文明很必需而且重要．第二段具體講述如何成為一名"講文明，禮貌，守紀(jì)律"的中學(xué)生．本段用"When we…，we should…"排比句型，從"在家庭的表現(xiàn)"、"在學(xué)校的表現(xiàn)"、"在公共場(chǎng)合的表現(xiàn)"幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)講述．條理文明，生動(dòng)具體．其中的try one's best，get on well with，be ready to do，had better等等結(jié)構(gòu)為本文增色不少．第三段再次強(qiáng)調(diào)中心：無(wú)論在哪兒，我們都應(yīng)該舉止文明做好學(xué)生．并進(jìn)一步升華主題：如果我們舉止文明，我們的社會(huì)就會(huì)越來(lái)越好．