Question

假如你是林華，就個(gè)人愛(ài)好帶來(lái)的困惑給英國(guó)朋友Daniel發(fā)電子郵件進(jìn)行交流并請(qǐng)求幫助。

林華	愛(ài)好	對(duì)實(shí)踐顏色療法(therapy)感興趣；時(shí)常建議同學(xué)……（自由發(fā)揮）；在業(yè)余時(shí)間經(jīng)常到圖書(shū)館閱讀資料或熬夜到很晚觀(guān)看相關(guān)的記錄片(documentary)
困惑	得不到父母的理解
觀(guān)點(diǎn)	1.業(yè)余愛(ài)好有助于從中學(xué)到很多知識(shí)；2.業(yè)余愛(ài)好將對(duì)未來(lái)的發(fā)展有利；3. ……(至少一點(diǎn))
父母	觀(guān)點(diǎn)	時(shí)間應(yīng)花在功課上；成績(jī)就是一切

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右，信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2. 可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但文中不要提及真實(shí)的校名和人名。

Dear Daniel,

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my parents.

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What shall I do? Can you offer me some advice? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes.

Yours,

                                                               Lin Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

Dear Daniel,

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my parents. I don’t know how to deal with it and would like your help.

You know I am interested in life on practicing colour therapy. I often advise my classmates on how to use colours to change their moods. In my spare time I often go to the library to find something to read. Sometimes I even stay up late watching the documentaries about it. This makes my parents very angry. To them, good marks are everything and they think I should spend more time on my lessons.

I think healthy hobbies can help me with my studies. It will also be good for my future development. What’s more, hobbies can help me relax and make my life more interesting. But I don’t think my parents understand me. I feel bad about that.

What shall I do? Can you offer me some suggestions? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes

Yours,

Lin Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文是材料作文，考生在寫(xiě)作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，把握寫(xiě)作要求和寫(xiě)作目的。本文要求寫(xiě)一篇e-mail，內(nèi)容是就個(gè)人愛(ài)好帶來(lái)的困惑給英國(guó)朋友Daniel發(fā)電子郵件進(jìn)行交流并請(qǐng)求幫助。說(shuō)個(gè)人的觀(guān)點(diǎn)應(yīng)該用第一人稱(chēng)，父母的觀(guān)點(diǎn)應(yīng)該用they做主語(yǔ)。時(shí)態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫(xiě)作前最好列出提綱，寫(xiě)出有關(guān)的短語(yǔ)和固定表達(dá)備用。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 本文做到了包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)運(yùn)用正確。還恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了些短語(yǔ)和句式，如how to deal with ; In my spare time;否定前移等等。并注意了句子開(kāi)頭的變化和的銜接如：What’s more ，But等等。

考點(diǎn)：圖表作文。