Question

15．Write at least 60words about the topic"When my friend is sad，I will  …"．（以"當(dāng)我朋友難過時(shí)，我會(huì) …"為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格．）
Use the following points as a reference （以下問題僅供參考）
★What often makes your friend sad？
★What will you do for your friend when he/she is sad？
★How does your friend feel about what you've done for him/her？
My best friend is Lily．She always shares her feelings with me．
Her awful score often makes her sad．When she doesn't pass the test，teachers and her parents will be angry with her．
I am sorry to know that，but I will tell her there is a old saying‘Let bygones be bygones'andI will teach her the knowledge that she doesn't know．I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．
When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder．That's what I want to see．I hope that she will pass the test and always be happy．
Lily is my best friend and I will always stay with her whenever she is happy or sad．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述．語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
高分句型：

①I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．我也讓她更加努力地學(xué)習(xí)，以便她能通過下一次測試．句子中ask sb to do sth要求某人做某事，后面跟to引導(dǎo)的不定式形式，so that為了，引導(dǎo)一個(gè)目的狀語從句．

②When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder．當(dāng)我為她做這樣做的時(shí)候，她總是感到很高興，并且下決心更努力地學(xué)習(xí)．
句子中when引導(dǎo)一個(gè)時(shí)間狀語從句，表示當(dāng)…的時(shí)候，feel是一個(gè)系動(dòng)詞，后面跟形容詞作表語；make one's mind to do sth下決心做某事，后面跟to引導(dǎo)的不定式短語．

解答 My best friend is Lily．She always shares her feelings with me．（引出話題）
Her awful score often makes her sad．When she doesn't pass the test，teachers and her parents will be angry with her．（點(diǎn)出讓朋友難過的事情）
I am sorry to know that，but I will tell her there is a old saying‘Let bygones be bygones'and I will teach her the knowledge that she doesn't know．I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．（高分句型）（為朋友排憂解難）
When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder（高分句型）．That's what I want to see．I hope that she will pass the test and always be happy．（朋友的感受）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此題為提綱作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住描述的重點(diǎn)，把所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來，要求語句通順，單詞，語法，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書寫規(guī)范，字?jǐn)?shù)合乎要求，切忌出現(xiàn)中文式的英語，這樣才能算是一篇好作文．