Question

11．你的同學(xué)李蕾樂(lè)于助人（helpful），積極樂(lè)觀（positive）．她在上星期日下午回校途中幫助了一位受傷的老人．請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文向英語(yǔ)報(bào)English Times 投稿，簡(jiǎn)要敘述她做好事的經(jīng)過(guò)，并談?wù)勀愕母邢耄?br />

What happened	an old man seriously hurt in the leg what Li Lei did
Your idea	misunderstanding（誤解） or even trouble，or the right thing？ …

注意：（1）短文須包括上述全部要點(diǎn)，應(yīng)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
（2）詞數(shù)：100左右．短文開(kāi)頭已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）．
A lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others now．However，Li Lei acted differently．Last Sunday afternoon，on her way back to school，LiLei came across an old man lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．She immediately stopped，called 120 and practiced first aid．Soon，the ambulance came．When everything was OK，she left for school．
Such is LiLei，a helpful，positive and determined person．Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble when we do good，I strongly believe that she has done the right thing．As responsible citizens，it is our duty to help people in need．Also，helping others means helping ourselves in a sense，doesn't it？．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是簡(jiǎn)述李蕾做好事的經(jīng)過(guò)，并談?wù)勀愕母邢耄畷r(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．李蕾做好事的經(jīng)過(guò)；上星期日下午回校途中幫助了一位腿部受傷的老人
2．我的感想；誤解還是更麻煩？或者是正確的事？
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
on one's way to  去某地的路上
come across 遇見(jiàn)
leave for  離開(kāi)去某地
in need 處于危急中
【高分句型】
1．Last Sunday afternoon，①on her way back to school，Li Lei  ②came across an old man ③lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．
①on one's way to  去某地的路上
②come across 遇見(jiàn)
③動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)作為后置定語(yǔ)，修飾前面的man．
2．①Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble ②when we do good，I strongly believe ③that she has done the right thing．
①although雖然，引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，不能與but連用．
②when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
③that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為believe的賓語(yǔ)．
3．As responsible citizens，①it is our duty to help people②in need．
①it作為形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式做真正主語(yǔ)．
②in need 處于危急中，做后置定語(yǔ)，修飾people．

解答 A lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others now．However，Li Lei acted differently．
Last Sunday afternoon，on her way back to school，Li Lei  came across an old man lying on the ground，seriously hurt in the leg．【高分句型】She immediately stopped，called 120 and practiced first aid．Soon，the ambulance came．When everything was OK，she left for school．（李蕾做好事的經(jīng)過(guò)）
Such is Li Lei，a helpful，positive and determined person．Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble when we do good，I strongly believe that she has done the right thing．【高分句型】As responsible citizens，it is our duty to help people in need．【高分句型】Also，helping others means helping ourselves in a sense，doesn't it？（我的感想）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇記敘文，記敘文包括時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物、事件，首先敘述做好事的經(jīng)過(guò)，將對(duì)此好事表明自己的感情提升為要點(diǎn)，更為重要進(jìn)行闡述，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化．
一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．