Question

假設(shè)你叫王圓，你現(xiàn)在是一名九年級(jí)學(xué)生,你現(xiàn)在遇到了一個(gè)困難，不知如何解決，你要寫信告訴劉老師，他是你們學(xué)校的青少年工作者，你希望他給你提供一些建議。字?jǐn)?shù)在70詞左右。信的要點(diǎn)如下：
你有很多興趣愛(ài)好，但你經(jīng)常很忙，找不到足夠的時(shí)間來(lái)做想做的事。
你不能在學(xué)習(xí)和興趣愛(ài)好兩方面獲得平衡。
3. 所以你感到很有壓力，壓力的來(lái)源有：
①老師給你的壓力：家庭作業(yè)
②父母給你的壓力：對(duì)你要求嚴(yán)格，想你得高分。
③自己給自己的壓力是……（如：想要成為班上最優(yōu)秀的學(xué)生）
4. 你想通過(guò)多穿白色的衣服來(lái)減少壓力，但不是非常有用。
5. 你希望劉老師盡快回信，給你提供意見(jiàn)和幫助。
參考詞匯：壓力pressure
Dear Mr Liu,
I am a Grade 9 student. I have a problem, but I don’t know
Yours sincerely
Wang Yuan

Answer 1

Dear Teacher Liu,
My name is WangYuan,and I am a stuent in JuRong No.2 Middle Schoool.I have some problems,and I hope you can help me. I have many hobbies,but I am always busy,I can't find any enough time to do the things what I want to do.I know that it's important to have balance in studying and do the things what I like to do. But I have a lot of homework to do every day. And my parents are strick with me in study because they want me to get good marks. I also want to be a top student in our class. So I feel great pressure.
I want to wear white clothes to make my pressure be less,but it's not very useful. Can you help me?
Yours, WangYuan

試題分析：這是一篇提綱式的給材料作文。這種作文主要考查學(xué)生運(yùn)用已學(xué)的語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)和已掌握的英語(yǔ)寫作技能準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)客觀事實(shí)，闡述個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，進(jìn)行思想交流的書面表達(dá)能力。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文寫作中注意避免句式重復(fù)而且使用了大量的的短語(yǔ)，可見(jiàn)該生英語(yǔ)功底扎實(shí)。.如I can't find any enough time to do the things what I want to do，do the things what I like to do，because,and ,so 等等，使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。