Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)（計(jì)15分）

根據(jù)下面表格的內(nèi)容的提示，以 “Changes in my hometown” 為題，用英語寫一篇80字左右的短文。

	過去	現(xiàn)在
環(huán)境	道路臟，狹小，到處是垃圾 有大塊的空地	道路寬闊干凈、路邊綠樹成蔭 有商店和高樓大廈
生活	低矮的房子 收音機(jī)、電視	新公寓 電腦、手機(jī)、私家車
你的觀點(diǎn)	……（至少寫一句話）

Changes in my hometown

Great changes

Answer 1

【答案】

Changes in my hometown

Great changes have taken place in my hometown during the past few years. In the past, the roads used to be very dirty and narrow. What’s more, there was rubbish everywhere! People lived in low houses. Life was so boring for them that they could only listen to the radio or watch TV for fun. There were also many open spaces in the village.

But now, the dirty narrow roads have turned into wide clean ones, with green trees, modern shops and tall buildings on both sides of them. People here have moved into new flats. More and more people have bought their own computers, mobiles and even private cars!

I feel satisfied with life in my hometown. I will work hard to make it more beautiful in the future.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以Changes in my hometown為題，講一講自己家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的變化。題目中給出了一張表格，里面有一些提示的內(nèi)容，這些內(nèi)容中對(duì)比了家鄉(xiāng)過去和現(xiàn)在的樣子，從中我們可以看出家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生了巨大的變化，我們需要用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來，要符合英語的表達(dá)規(guī)范。通過分析審題可知，這篇短文我們?cè)趯懽鞯臅r(shí)候要特別注意將過去跟現(xiàn)在的不同表達(dá)清楚，如果像表格中那樣，一項(xiàng)一項(xiàng)的對(duì)比，會(huì)顯得比較啰嗦。因此我們可以寫成兩段，第一段來描述家鄉(xiāng)過去的樣子，第二段來描述家鄉(xiāng)現(xiàn)在的樣子，這樣我們就可以清楚的看到這些變化，而且文章的條理也很清楚。寫作的時(shí)候，要注意使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，還需要多使用積累的好的句型和短語，增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文，短文中作者按照表格中的提示，給我們介紹了家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的變化。這篇作文主要有三個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：一是內(nèi)容完整，有條理。這篇短文共分成三段，第一段講述了家鄉(xiāng)過去的樣子；第二段描寫了家鄉(xiāng)現(xiàn)在的樣子，從中我們可以看到，家鄉(xiāng)有了很大的變化；第三段作者發(fā)表了自己的感想。第二個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)是使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱。在第一段中，因?yàn)檎f的是家鄉(xiāng)過去的樣子，因此這一段都使用了一般過去時(shí)，動(dòng)詞的形式都非常準(zhǔn)確；第二段和第三段使用了現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。第三個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)是短文中作者使用了比較多的好的短語和句型，如Great changes have taken place in my hometown during the past few years、Life was so boring for them that they could only listen to the radio or watch TV for fun.、the dirty narrow roads have turned into wide clean ones, with green trees, modern shops and tall buildings on both sides of them.、I will work hard to make it more beautiful in the future等。