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書面表達： Life is just like a mirror（鏡子） , you smile at it , and it smiles at you ,too.請以“Learn to smile ”為題寫一篇文章

提示：1，學(xué)會對自己微笑

      2， 學(xué)會對他人微笑

      3， 微笑是一種語言

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

Learn to smile

Life is just like a mirror, you smile at it, and it smiles at you，too. So we must learn to smile. You need to smile when you face to the trouble. If you were misunderstood or did badly in the exam, you can smile at yourself. Smile is a kind of encouragement. It can make you believe in yourself. The most important thing is that smile can make you have a good health.

     Smiling at others is easy. It can make anyone happy and it can bring the happiness to others. So do you. When your friends fail, your smile means "Have another try!"

     Smile is a kind of language which can't be heard by anyone, but persons who always know its meaning, So when you smile, although you don't say any word, you can get much. Let’s learn to smile often, I believe it can make the whole warm and you will get a happy life. 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，題目為Learn to smile，學(xué)會微笑，要求我們從三個方面進行表達，即學(xué)會對自己微笑、學(xué)會對他人微笑、微笑是一種語言。我們的文章應(yīng)該從這三個方面著手進行。寫好這篇文章的關(guān)鍵是說明白我們?yōu)槭裁匆獙W(xué)會微笑，微笑對自己，對他人，對這個世界有什么好處。同時我們還要注意表達的準確性。還要使用好的連接詞和句型以使文意連貫，流暢。通過審題可知這篇文章應(yīng)注意使用一般現(xiàn)在時表達，注意分段，使文章有層次。

【亮點說明】這篇范文書寫規(guī)范，內(nèi)容完整，層次分明。文章分成三段來進行闡述。第一段主要表達的是smile at yourself，對自己微笑；第二段是smile at others，對別人微笑；第三段是一個總結(jié)段，smile is a kind of language，微笑是一種語言，它可以給自己，給別人，給這個世界帶來好處。文章注意使用不同的句型和排比句來增強文章的表現(xiàn)力，如You need to smile when you face to the trouble. If you were misunderstood or did bad in the exam, you can smile at yourself、So when you smile, although you don't say any word, you can get much、It can make anyone happy and it can bring the happiness to others等。整體表達流暢，有節(jié)奏。

考點：話題作文。