Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)(10分)
假如你是Lily，根據(jù)下面表格的內(nèi)容, 寫(xiě)一篇5個(gè)句子以上的短文介紹一下自己。

Name	Lily	Age	13 years old
School	No. 5 Middle School, 16 classrooms
Favourite Food	fish	Favourite drink		tea
Favourite sports	swimming, table tennis, basketball
Telephone number	65353971
Father	policeman, police station
Mother	nurse，hospital

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Answer 1

Hello，my name is Lily.I’m 13years old.Now I am studying in No.5 Middle School。There are 16 classrooms in our school.My favourite food is fish and my favourite drink is tea.I like swimming、table tennis and basket ball.My teleghone number is 65353971.My father works is a policeman,he works in a police station.My mother is a nurse.She works in a hospital.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，題目中給出的材料較為詳細(xì)。動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容組織語(yǔ)言，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)，關(guān)鍵單詞等問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中注意將材料所給內(nèi)容介紹清楚，亦可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行描述，注意時(shí)態(tài)和主謂一致等問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中注意使用敘述順序，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用的句式短語(yǔ)較為簡(jiǎn)單.如:I’m……；My……is……等。但是通過(guò)一些代詞的使用，如：he、設(shè)等的使用，使得文章避免單純的重復(fù)，使得短文既通俗易懂又邏輯清楚。讓我們對(duì)Lily有了一個(gè)比較全面的了解，不失為一篇上等作文。