Question

【題目】【2016江西】書面表達。

書包伴我學習，伴我成長，某英文報以“My schoolbag”為題，舉辦中學生征文活動。請根據(jù)下列的圖表信息，寫一篇短文。內容包括：書包的外形特征、用途和書包背后的課業(yè)問題以及課余你期望做的事情。

提示：1、短文應包括圖表中的全部信息，條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明;

2、短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實的人名和地名;

3、詞數(shù)不少于80，開頭已給出，不計入總次數(shù)。

My Schoolbag

I have a schoolbag._________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

My Schoolbag

I have a schoolbag. It is used for carrying the school things, such as books, pens and so on. It looks like a luggage which always accompanies me in the world of knowledge.

My schoolbag is always by my side. However, it also brings us many problems. We have to do so much homework that we cannot get enough sleep. Instead of enjoying the wonderful weekends, we are forced to have extra classes with it. If we have more spare time, we can take part in sports and actives. Besides, we can develop hobbies and interest as well.

As a middle school student, I hope my schoolbag can share my joy and happiness rather than become a burden.

【解析】

試題分析：短文介紹了書包的外形特征、用途和書包背后的課業(yè)問題以及課余期望做的事情。要注意句子的時態(tài)及語態(tài)，不要寫漢語式的句子，要符合英語語法。要注意上下文的銜接。

寫作亮點：短文用了一些短語和句式，如：It is used for carrying the school things, such as books, pens and so on. It looks like a luggage which always accompanies me in the world of knowledge.If we have more spare time, we can take part in sports and actives.用了which引導的定語從句，if引導的條件狀語從句，that引導的賓語從句，用了過渡詞besides等，增加了文章的亮點。