Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

童年是快樂、精彩的。七年級(jí)的你們即將迎來最后一個(gè)兒童節(jié)，如果你有一天的假期，你會(huì)做什么讓自己的最后一個(gè)“六一”過得更快樂、難忘？根據(jù)表格內(nèi)容寫一篇約60字題為“My plans for Children’s Day”的短文。開頭已給出�？蛇m當(dāng)發(fā)揮聯(lián)想，增加內(nèi)容。

When	What to do
In the morning	watch the school talent show …
In the afternoon	visit a park, have a picnic, …
In the evening	…

My plans for Children’s Day

Time flies! Children’s Day is coming soon.________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

My Plans for Children’s Day

Time flies! Children’s Day is coming soon. On Children’s Day, first, I will watch the school talent show in the morning. Then I am going sightseeing.I am going to have a picnic in Haide Park. After the picnic, I am going to a shop to buy clothes. Last, I am going to come home at half past four. In the evening, I will play games online。I will have a good time this day.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇材料作文，介紹自己兒童節(jié)打算做的3-4件事情。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般將來時(shí)態(tài)，人稱為第一人稱。行文中應(yīng)注意主謂一致問題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)應(yīng)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用，比如：I will visit…，I am going to…及I will have…等句式的應(yīng)用。同時(shí)注意運(yùn)連接詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己將會(huì)玩得愉快。

寫作亮點(diǎn)： 這篇短文涵蓋了題目要求的所有要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫，符合邏輯。在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)組織上多用簡(jiǎn)單句，文章脈絡(luò)清晰，自然流暢。同時(shí)，文章還使用了一些常用的句式、短語(yǔ)和連接詞，這為文章增添了文采和層次感。