Question

【題目】寫(xiě)作

某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文，標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”，請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇英文稿件，內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):

1. Who was the person you made happy?

2. When was it?

3. What did you say or do?

4. Why did it make him/her happy?

5. How did you feel at that moment?

注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右（題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。

2.文中不得出現(xiàn)可能透考生真實(shí)身份的任何信息。

Answer 1

【答案】Last summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural area.When I arrived there,I couldn't adjust to the weather and life style.However,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great progress.In order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as well.As a result,my English improved a lot.Also,I made friends with some of my students.We are still keeping in touch by letter now.

In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that summer.If I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.

【解析】寫(xiě)作這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文，需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問(wèn)題的回答，描述一次自己讓別人開(kāi)心快樂(lè)的經(jīng)歷，是一篇記敘文，首先要讀懂5個(gè)問(wèn)題，其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問(wèn)題的回答聯(lián)系在一起，變成一篇短文，同時(shí)也要注意在描述過(guò)去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：既然這是一篇記敘文，就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事，需要加上必要的背景，指明時(shí)間（Last summer），地點(diǎn)（in rural area），簡(jiǎn)要概括事件（teach children English），這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆，信息量豐富。短語(yǔ)和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少，例如“adjust to…”（調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…），“as time went by”（隨著時(shí)間的流逝），“made great progress”（取得巨大進(jìn)步），“keep on learning”（繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)），“In a word”（總而言之）等等短語(yǔ)使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度，表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂(lè)于參與，這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表意更加清晰。