Question

16．Write at least 60words according to the given topic-Thank you，mymother
（根據(jù)所給話題：感謝你，我的媽媽 寫(xiě)一篇不少于60詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格．）
（注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)任何姓名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分．）
每個(gè)人在成長(zhǎng)路上都遇到過(guò)幫助過(guò)自己的人，父母、同學(xué)、朋友、老師、鄰居等等，他們無(wú)私的付出和真心的幫助讓我們健康成長(zhǎng)，對(duì)于幫助過(guò)你的人你是否有想要說(shuō)的話？除了感謝，我們應(yīng)該如何向他們學(xué)習(xí)呢？
Thank you，myIlike my mother the most．Because she is the one who gave me birth and brought me to this world．When I was younger，she took good care of me．As time passes on，I grew older and even became a student in middle school．Everyday，she wakes me up in the morning，and cooks breakfast for me，and when I come home from school，she already cooks the dinner for me．This is my mother，the greatest person in the world．She is great not because she saves the world，but she is a mother．
Every mother in the world is the best．I think everyone should love their mothers．If there are much more love in the world，our world will become more and more beautiful．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇小作文．本文主要是第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)較為復(fù)雜，注意時(shí)態(tài)一致問(wèn)題．語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
【高分句型】
As time passes on，I grew older and even became a student in middle school，
隨著時(shí)間的推移，我長(zhǎng)大并成為一名中學(xué)生．
As time passes on表示隨著時(shí)間的逝去，強(qiáng)調(diào)媽媽對(duì)我的不間斷的關(guān)懷．起到承上啟下的作用．
If there are much more love in the world，our world will become more and more beautiful．
如果我們的世界有更多的愛(ài)，我們的世界將變的越來(lái)越美好．
本句是if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，主句應(yīng)將來(lái)時(shí)，從句應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．

解答 Thank you，my  mother
     I like my mother the most．【我最喜歡的人】Because she is the one who gave me birth and brought me to this world．When I was younger，she took good care of me．As time passes on，I grew older and even became a student in middle school．【高分句型】Everyday，she wakes me up in the morning，and cooks breakfast for me，and when I come home from school，she already cooks the dinner for me．This is my mother，the greatest person in the world．She is great not because she saves the world，but she is a mother．【喜歡的原因】
   Every mother in the world is the best．I think everyone should love their mothers．If there are much more love in the world，our world will become more and more beautiful．【高分句型】【心得】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇小作文，在寫(xiě)作中要做到三審：體裁、時(shí)態(tài)、人稱；   三思：詞匯-＞短語(yǔ)-＞句式； 三查：要點(diǎn)、拼寫(xiě)和語(yǔ)法、連貫．