Question

4．三年的初中生活即將結(jié)束，三年中給你留下最深印象的是哪位老師？為什么？請(qǐng)結(jié)合自身經(jīng)歷，以"The teacher l will never forget"為題，寫(xiě)一篇短文．
內(nèi)容包括：
1．簡(jiǎn)要介紹老師的性格或特長(zhǎng)
.2．至少列舉一個(gè)事例，說(shuō)明老師是如何在學(xué)習(xí)或生活上幫助你，給你留下深刻印象的，
3．感謝老師，祝福老師．
作文要求：
1.80字左右．
2．必須包括提示內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校，老師的姓名請(qǐng)一律使用Mr Li或Ms Li．
The teacher I will never forget
            ．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"The teacher l will never forget"為題談?wù)勅�年中給你留下最深印象的是哪位老師？為什么？時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱(chēng)主要為第一、三人稱(chēng)．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．簡(jiǎn)要介紹老師的性格或特長(zhǎng)
2．至少列舉一個(gè)事例，說(shuō)明老師是如何在學(xué)習(xí)或生活上幫助你，給你留下深刻印象的，
3．感謝老師，祝福老師．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
not only…but also…不僅…而且…
be worried about 擔(dān)心
offer sb sth 給某人提供某物
with one's help 在某人的幫助下

【高分句型】
1．The teacher I will never forget is Mr Li，an English teacher．
I will never forget是省略了關(guān)系詞who的定語(yǔ)從句，who做賓語(yǔ)，故省略，修飾先行詞the teacher．
2．He helped us not only in class but also after class．
not only…but also…不僅…而且…連接兩個(gè)對(duì)等成分．
3．About two years ago，Mr Li noticed①that I ②was worried about my poor pronunciation．
①that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為notice的賓語(yǔ)．
②be worried about 擔(dān)心

解答 The teacher I will never forget
How time flies!Three years has passed since I became a middle school student．I had many good memories of my classmates and teachers．
The teacher I will never forget is Mr Li，an English teacher．【高分句型】He is very kind and friendly．（介紹老師的性格）He helped us not only in class but also after class．【高分句型】About two years ago，Mr Li noticed that I was worried about my poor pronunciation．【高分句型】So he offered me many suggestions to improve it，and he also gave me every chance possible to speak in class．With his help，my pronunciation has greatly improved．（舉例說(shuō)明對(duì)自己的幫助）
I want to say thanks to Mr Li，and I wish him a healthy and happy life in the future!（感謝老師，祝福老師）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題是寫(xiě)一篇給定要求的書(shū)面表達(dá)，寫(xiě)作的話題為我難忘的老師，內(nèi)容包括難忘老師的姓名，所教，性格特征，和對(duì)我所提供的幫助，最后對(duì)老師表示祝愿，寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)符合題意，同時(shí)要注意時(shí)態(tài)的合理使用和語(yǔ)言的準(zhǔn)確性．