Question

10．Dear Sir/Madam，
I am writing with reference to the article entitled"Everything's jut perfect，thanks!"which appeared in the June issue of your magazine．Following a discussion of the article in our English class，I have been chosen to express our disagreement with some of the views contained in the article．
First of all，we find it difficult to believe that such a large number of people are satisfied with the education system and with their working conditions．This is certainly not the case here，where many people have complaints about the poor standards of education．In fact，lack of job satisfaction is known to be among the greatest causes of stress in this country．
Secondly，it certainly is not true that most people are happy with public transport，either in our cities or in the country．Furthermore，one of the most commonly heard complaints is that there are insufficient buses and trains to serve on ever-increasing population．It's a well-known fact that our public transport system is seriously under-funded and our roads are heavily crowded．And，as far as city life is concerned，a significant percentage would move if they had the opportunity．
Finally，we feel it is unrealistic of you to claim that most people have enough money to live on．Were this so，we would have none of the financial problems faced by most people and widespread poverty would not be an issue．
To conclude，we found your article to be extremely inaccurate in its assessment of living conditions．Since your magazine claims to represent students from all over the world，we look forward to reading more objective reporting in future issues．
Yours faithfully，
Mark Wiseman．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個(gè)步驟：1． 認(rèn)真審題，找準(zhǔn)提示語(yǔ)中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時(shí)態(tài)．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
高分句型一：
We found your article to be extremely inaccurate in its assessment of living conditions
我們發(fā)現(xiàn)你的文章在其生活狀況的評(píng)估是非常不準(zhǔn)確的．
高分句型二：
Furthermore，buses and trains to serve on ever-increasing population are insufficient and that most people have enough money to live on is unrealistic．
此外，公共汽車和火車服務(wù)不斷增長(zhǎng)的人口是不夠的，大多數(shù)人有足夠的錢生活是不現(xiàn)實(shí)的．

解答 We found your article to be extremely inaccurate in its assessment of living conditions（高分句型一）．First，the number of people who are satisfied with the education system and working conditions is huge．Second，the transportation system is not that perfect．Furthermore，buses and trains to serve on ever-increasing population are insufficient and that most people have enough money to live on is unrealistic（高分句型二）．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題，并此為基礎(chǔ)進(jìn)行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮．不僅考查學(xué)生在內(nèi)容、結(jié)構(gòu)安排、語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用和組織方面的能力，而且對(duì)學(xué)生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求．