Question

【題目】假設你是李華。在剛結束的中學生英語演講比賽中獲得了第一名。準備比賽期間， 你得到了外教James的指導和幫助。請你根據以下要點提示給外教James寫一封郵件。內容 包括：

1. 獲獎的消息

2. 外教的幫助

3. 感恩的心情

注意：

1. 詞數(shù) 80 左右；

2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear James,

I’m eagerly writing to inform you of my success in the English speech contest.

It’s indeed a pleasant surprise for me to rank first among so many excellent contestants. But without your patient guidance, I couldn’t have made so great an achievement. You helped me polish the draft and improve my pronunciation. You trained me in simulated question and answer sessions (問答環(huán)節(jié)), which turned out really helpful in the real competition. No words are strong enough to express my heartfelt gratitude to you.

Thank you very much and wish you all the best.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達考查書信的寫作。要求考生給外教James寫信，告訴他自英語演講比賽中獲一等獎的消息，并向他表示感謝。

體裁：應用文

時態(tài)：根據提示，時態(tài)應以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時為主

結構：總分總

內容要求：

1. 獲獎的消息

2. 外教的幫助

3. 感恩的心情

第二步：列提綱（重點詞組）

be eager to do sth./ inform sb. of sth./ win the first prize/ thank sb. for sth./ offer sb. sth./ appreciate sb. doing sth./ help sb. do sth./ encourage sb. to do sth.

第三步：連詞成句

I’m eagerly writing to tell you my success in the English speech contest.

It’s indeed a pleasant surprise for me to win the first prize in the contest.

But for your patient guidance, I couldn’t have made such a great achievement.

You helped me polish the draft and improve my pronunciation.

You trained me in simulated question and answer sessions, which turned out really helpful in the real competition.

No words are strong enough to express my heartfelt gratitude to you.

Thank you very much and wish you all the best.

第四步：連句成篇（加入銜接詞或從句）

表示并列的連詞：and/but/or/so…

狀語從句連詞：because/ if/ though/ although…

定語從句連詞：which/ that/ when/ where…

第五步：修改潤色（加入高級詞匯或短語）

【高分句型1】

It was you that helped me to perfect the draft and correct my pronunciation.是你幫助我完善草稿，和糾正發(fā)音。句中使用了強調句it was…that…

【高分句型2】

What I am eager to inform you is that I win the first prize in the English speech contest.我迫切想告訴你的是我在英語演講比賽中獲得了一等獎。本句使用了what引導主語從句，和that引導表語從句。