Question

12．Once upon a time in a land far far away，there was a wonderful old man who loved everything．Animals，spiders，insects…
One day while walking through the woods the nice old man found a cocoon（繭） of a butterfly．He took it home．
A few days later，a small opening appeared； he sat and watched the butterfly for several hours as it struggled to force its body through that little hole．Then it seemed to stop making any progress．It appeared as if it had gotten as far as it could and it could go no farther．
Then the man decided to help the butterfly，so he took a pair of scissors and cut off the remaining bit of the cocoon．The butterfly then came out easily．
But it had a swollen body and small，shriveled （萎縮的） wings．The man continued to watch the butterfly because he expected that，at any moment，the wings would enlarge and expand to be able to support the body．Neither happened!In fact，the butterfly spent the rest of its life crawling around with a swollen body and shriveled wings．It never was able to fly．
What the man in his kindness and haste did not understand was that the restricting cocoon and the struggle required for the butterfly to get through the tiny opening were Nature's way of forcing fluid from the body of the butterfly into its wings so that it would be ready for flight once it achieved its freedom from the cocoon．
Sometimes struggles are exactly what we need in our life．If we were allowed to go through our life without any obstacles，it would cripple us．We would not be as strong as what we could have been．And we could never fly．
[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]
1．以約30詞概括短文內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；
2．以約120詞就"個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)需要艱難生活的磨礪"這一話題發(fā)表你的看法，并包含以下要點(diǎn)：
（1）你讀了這個(gè)故事后的感受；
（2）敘述當(dāng)前父母溺愛(ài)子女的現(xiàn)象和由此造成的后果；
（3）假如你是父母一方，你會(huì)如何磨礪自己的孩子？
[寫(xiě)作要求]
1．可以使用實(shí)例或其他論述方法支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中句子；
2．文中不能出現(xiàn)考生真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)型寫(xiě)作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫(xiě)：第一段：概況所給短文要點(diǎn)．第二段：過(guò)渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語(yǔ)言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語(yǔ)：in order to（為了），lessen the pain（減輕疼痛），because of（因?yàn)椋�，more or less（或多或少），contribute to（促成），achieve one's life goal （實(shí)現(xiàn)某人的目標(biāo)），satisfy one's needs （滿足某人的需求），be unable to（不能做某事），deprive sb of sth（剝奪某人某事），keep sb well informed（通知某人某事），be ready to do （樂(lè)于做某事），expose sb to sth（使某人接觸，體驗(yàn)?zāi)呈拢�，face any difficulties（面對(duì)任何困難），provide sb with sth（給某人提供某物），fight for（為某事而奮斗），conquer challenges（征服挑戰(zhàn)）．
【高分句型一】
1．A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon，only to find that it could never fly because of his help．
此處是由"only to do"作結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)，表示意料之外的結(jié)果．主句為"A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon"．
【高分句型二】
1．It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success．
此處是強(qiáng)調(diào)句型，如果去掉強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的骨架"It was/is …that"，原句句子成分齊全，句意通順．
 主句結(jié)構(gòu)為"would/could/should/might+have done"．
【高分句型三】
3．Without these trials，we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story．
此處是含蓄虛擬語(yǔ)氣，介詞"without"可以譯為"如果沒(méi)有"，可以轉(zhuǎn)換成條件狀語(yǔ)從句"If it weren't for these trials"，表示與現(xiàn)在的事實(shí)相反．
【高分句型四】
4．If I were a parent，I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties．
此處是虛擬語(yǔ)氣在if條件狀語(yǔ)從句中的用法，是與現(xiàn)在的事實(shí)相反，從句結(jié)構(gòu)為"were/過(guò)去式"．
 主句結(jié)構(gòu)為"would/could/should/might+動(dòng)詞原形"．

解答 A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the cocoon，only to find that it could never fly because of his help．【高分句型一】（概括）
The story sets me thinking．Our life is more or less like this．Sometimes，struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth．It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success．【高分句型二】Without these trials，we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story．【高分句型三】（感受）
Nowadays，with only one child in most families，parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child's needs and even do for him what should be done by himself．Consequently，the child is unable to look after himself without his parents'presence．Too much care from parents deprives children of chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles．Just as a saying goes，"Flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm"． （當(dāng)前父母溺愛(ài)子女的現(xiàn)象和由此造成的后果）
If I were a parent，I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties．【高分句型四】Besides，I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties，providing them with chances to fight for his bright future by conquering challenges．（個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)：如果是父母一方，會(huì)如何磨礪自己的孩子）

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