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4．假設(shè)你叫李華．你的英國(guó)朋友Andrew下個(gè)月要來(lái)你校學(xué)習(xí)兩個(gè)月，他來(lái)信請(qǐng)你對(duì)他上學(xué)期間的交通方式提出建議．現(xiàn)請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)回一封信．
1．建議騎自行車上學(xué)；
2．自行車是學(xué)生常用交通工具；
3．騎自行車的一些好處；
4．騎自行車需注意的問(wèn)題．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右，信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫好（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
2．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫．
Dear Andrew，
Very happy to hear from you and you're welcome to study in our school for the next two months．
                
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一封書信應(yīng)用文，向英國(guó)朋友來(lái)校學(xué)習(xí)的交通方式提出建議．要求提示較詳細(xì)，考生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的．考生在寫作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有三段內(nèi)容，第一段已經(jīng)給出提示，開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山表明自己的態(tài)度及建議--騎自行車上學(xué)；第二段具體描述騎自行車的好處及注意問(wèn)題；第三段結(jié)束，提出自己的希望，表達(dá)自己的祝福．另外，要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)．人稱用第二人稱．再有就是不能根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容逐字逐句的翻譯形成漢式的英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章符合書信的寫作要求，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿唬�文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如hear from，as to，recommend，no matter how busy，protect the environment并用動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)，buying or repairing a bicycle doesn't cost a lot；parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school；還運(yùn)用了主語(yǔ)從句：What you should do carefully is just to…； what I have mentioned above could be helpful…注意了句子的銜接如：Here are some reasons．Firstly，Next，Actually，In this way，Hopefully等．這些詞句用得恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，為文章增添色彩�?/p>

解答 Dear Andrew，
       Very happy to learn from you and you're welcome to study in our school for the next two months．As for the question about the transportation to and from school，I'd like to recommend your riding a bicycle．（高分句型一）Here are some reasons．
      Firstly，riding a bike to and from school is very common among the students，for buying or repairing a bicycle doesn't cost a lot．（高分句型二）Next，parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school，no matter how busy the traffic could be．（高分句型三）Actually，bicycle-riding is also a practical way to do exercise and protect the environment．What you should do carefully is just to keep an appropriate speed while riding and lock it after you're off it．In this way，you'll feel it simple and relaxing to ride a bicycle while you're here．
      Hopefully，what I've mentioned above could be helpful and wish you a fun time in our school．（高分句型四）                                                                        
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．