Question

1．假如你是李華．你的好友Mike是美國(guó)一所漢語(yǔ)學(xué)院的一名中學(xué)生．最近給你來信說他學(xué)漢語(yǔ)有一定的困難，對(duì)自己失去了信心，產(chǎn)生了厭學(xué)情緒．請(qǐng)你給他回一封信開導(dǎo)他．
要點(diǎn)如下：
1．沒有必要過于傷心；
2．要振作起來，盡量減少焦慮情緒；
3．和老師交流有助于你改進(jìn)；
4．探索適合自己的有效學(xué)習(xí)方法．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Mike，
I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your Chinese study and have lost interest in schoolwork．________________________________________________________________________________

                                                    Yours
                                                     Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本題考查電子郵件寫作，主要圍繞開導(dǎo)自己的好友，故郵件寫作時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)氣，要具有鼓舞性．題目要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，注意不要漏掉要點(diǎn)．范文結(jié)構(gòu)為兩段式的分總結(jié)構(gòu)，第一段為開導(dǎo)和勸慰，第二段收束全文．第一段第一句中I am sorry to hear that you didn't do well in 我很遺憾聽說…．為全文奠定了一個(gè)感情基調(diào)，即帶有一種同情勸慰性的語(yǔ)氣；第二句中so there is no need to feel too bad．使用了there is no need to…沒有必要…的固定句式；第四句Why not go on an outing with your friends or find time to listen to your favorite music？使用了一個(gè)疑問句，使得文章十分富有感情；第五句If you can talk to the teachers who you respect most，they may give you some practical advice that helps you to improve．使用了if領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句；最后一句Probably it's time for you to explore a new learning method which is better and more suitable for you．使用了which領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句．在短語(yǔ)使用上，使用了do well 做得好，In my opinion 在我看來，At this moment 此時(shí)，cheer up 高興起來，it's time to…是做…的時(shí)候等十分經(jīng)典的常用短語(yǔ)．在詞語(yǔ)使用上，本文詞語(yǔ)拿捏恰到好處，使得文章十分富有感情，如第一句I am sorry to hear that you 中sorry一詞的使用，以及最后一句I hope you can 中hope一詞的使用，極富勸慰性，可以說文章的語(yǔ)氣拿捏十分好，是文章最大亮點(diǎn)所在．總結(jié)：類似這類開導(dǎo)性勸慰性的郵件寫作時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)氣的拿捏，這會(huì)成為文章一大亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
In my view，Chinese is the most difficult for most foreign students，so there is no need to feel too bad．（高分句型一）
If you can talk to the teachers who you respect most，they may give you some practical advice that helps to improve．（高分句型二）
Probably it's time for you to explore a new learning method that is better and more suitable for you．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mike，
      I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your Chinese study and have lost interest in schoolwork．In my view，Chinese is the most difficult for most foreign students，so there is no need to feel too bad．（高分句型一）At this moment，you should cheer up and find ways to relieve your anxiety．Why not go for an outing with your friends or find time to listen to your favorite music？If you can talk to the teachers who you respect most，they may give you some practical advice that helps to improve．（高分句型二）Probably it's time for you to explore a new learning method that is better and more suitable for you．（高分句型三）
      Anyhow，I do hope you cab rebuild your self-confidence soon．
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．