Question

【題目】假定你是李華，近日目睹了一次嚴重的交通事故：一名小男孩因闖紅燈被車撞傷。此事引發(fā)了你對交通安全的思考。請根據(jù)以下要點給校英語報社投稿。

1.存在的問題；

2.造成的后果；

3.提出建議。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭和結尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear editor,

I'm Li Hua,a senior school student.I want to say something about the traffic problems.__________________

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear editor,

I’m Li Hua,a senior school student.I want to say something about the traffic problems.Recently,I witnessed that a boy ran the red light and was injured by a speedy car.What a pity!

I noticed that more and more traffic accidents happened on the road,most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules,such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.When accidents

happen,what we lose is not only time and money but health or even our lives.The problem of traffic safety is an urgent one because it concerns the safety of all of us.

So the government should carry out effective management of the traffic systems and everyone should raise the awareness of traffic safety and strictly obey the traffic rules.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】書面表達的解題思路：

1.確定文章的體裁，本題所要求寫的書面表達是書信格式，那么首先就需要知曉書信的寫作特點。

2.確定文章時態(tài)的基調，確定文章時態(tài)的基調對于整個寫作非常重要。它直接決定了不同句子使用的時態(tài)正確與否。

3. 給文章劃分基本段落，仔細閱讀題目要求和文字提示，領會要寫的文章的主題，確定文章的段落，寫出各段的主題句。本題中的內容要點有：1.介紹目睹的事情；2.反映存在的問題及造成的后果；3.提出建議。這樣確定文章的基本段落分為三段。

4.嘗試用高級詞匯，使可讀性增強。美化句子可以采用復合句和特殊的句型結構，也可以采用形式主語、形式賓語或簡略句來實現(xiàn)。

5.連句成篇，在連句成篇的過程中需要注意過渡句和連接詞的使用。

【范文亮點】

I noticed that more and more traffic accidents happened on the road, most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules, such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.

句意：我注意到在路上發(fā)生了越來越多的交通事故，其中大部分都是由于人們違反交通規(guī)則，比如不遵守交通信號，不顧速度限制而行駛。

句中“most of which resulted from people's breaking the traffic rules, such as disobeying traffic signals and moving on regardless of speed limits.”是非限制性定語從句，which代指traffic accidents，在從句中做主語，從句中such as對交通事故進行舉例說明。