Question

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下列圖畫描述的是你在十月十五日(星期五)放學(xué)路上發(fā)生的事情，請據(jù)此寫一篇日記，記敘事情發(fā)生的經(jīng)過。

注意：

    1．短文包括圖畫所表現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，使文章連貫、完整；

    2．詞數(shù)120左右。(不含給出部分)

October 15   Friday  Fine

This afternoon when I was on my way home from school, I found a building on fire. ___________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

October 15   Friday  Fine

This afternoon when I was on my way home from school, I found a building on fire. I rushed to a nearby telephone box and called the firefighters.

     Several minutes later, the firefighters arrived and tried their best to control the fire. With the help of the firefighters, a lot of people left the building safely. At that time a foreign woman came in a hurry to tell the firefighters something. But they couldn't understand what she said. I went to the woman and asked her what was happening. She told me that her daughter was still in the building. I told the firefighters about it at once. They immediately ran into the building. Two minutes later, they rushed out with the little girl.

The woman was very thankful to me and the firefighters for the help.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一則日記，格式已經(jīng)寫好。描述圖片是不能面面俱到，一定要講重點(diǎn)，甚至一句話就能概括一幅圖。主要描述自己是如何幫助外國人翻譯的，以及消防隊員是如何做的。最后可以增加外國婦女對自己和消防隊員的感謝。

考點(diǎn)：側(cè)重時間表達(dá)，時態(tài)一致，常見敘事表達(dá)如：be about to do ...when..., hardly...when,on doing...., later, immediately,eventually.

點(diǎn)評：日記一般要寫日期和天氣，寫在日記第一行的右上角，不過本篇已經(jīng)給出。如果是命題日記，要把標(biāo)題寫在日記的第二行。將正文空兩格寫在第三行，一般日記都是直接切入正題。日記一般都是第一人稱，時態(tài)用過去式，現(xiàn)在完成時和一般現(xiàn)在時。

寫作常見步驟推薦：1. 審題： 體裁， 時態(tài)，人稱。

                  2. 列要點(diǎn)，找準(zhǔn)動詞或動詞短語。

                  3. 擴(kuò)展句子。

                  4. 加關(guān)聯(lián)詞。

                  5. 核查錯誤：有無冠詞錯誤，拼寫錯誤，主謂一致錯誤等低級錯誤。

特別提醒：加強(qiáng)訓(xùn)練書寫，整潔美觀的卷面對作文的得分起著至關(guān)重要的作用。