Question

據(jù)報道，近年來全國一些城鎮(zhèn)幼兒園、小學(xué)校車重大安全事故頻發(fā)，造成嚴重傷亡，引起了社會極大關(guān)注。事故原因復(fù)雜。下面兩幅圖反映了其中兩種原因。
請你寫一篇短文，給某英文報社投稿，陳述這種現(xiàn)象、分析其原因并簡要發(fā)表自己的觀點。

禁止無證駕駛！

注意：1.詞數(shù)120左右
2.短文除包括圖畫提示的內(nèi)容外，至少再說明一個事故原因；
3.可以適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫。
參考詞匯：駕駛執(zhí)照 driving license
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Answer 1

It’s reported that school bus accidents have frequently happened in some towns recently, causing many deaths and injuries. Quite a few families are so deep in sorrow that it attracts a great deal of public attention. 
The tragedies resulted from varieties of reasons. First of all, a bus was crowded with too many children because people couldn’t afford to provide more buses for them in some towns or villages, which may result in the accidents. Secondly, some drivers took the risk of doing the job although they held no driving licenses. Thirdly, the laws about school bus safety haven’t been strictly observed in some places so that the operation of school buses is in chaos. 
As far as I’m concerned, the government should take more effective measures to protect school children against further disaster.

試題分析：這是一篇看圖作文，反映了幼兒園、小學(xué)校車重大安全事故頻發(fā)的問題，寫作時要認真讀圖，不要僅僅對圖畫進行描述，也要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。
【亮點說明】這篇范文最大的特點是使用了詞組和句式多變：result from源于，took the risk of doing 冒險做…，take more effective measures采取更多有效的措施， It’s reported that school bus accidents have frequently happened in some towns recently, causing many deaths and injuries. 這句話用了固定句型和現(xiàn)在分詞做結(jié)果狀語，Quite a few families are so deep in sorrow that it attracts a great deal of public attention. 這句話用了so …that句型， a bus was crowded with too many children because people couldn’t afford to provide more buses for them in some towns or villages, which may result in the accidents. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句， the laws about school bus safety haven’t been strictly observed in some places so that the operation of school buses is in chaos. 這句話用了so that引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句，還有范文中使用了一些關(guān)聯(lián)詞First of all, Secondly, Thirdly, As far as I’m concerned,，使文章更加連貫。