Question

12．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示，用英語(yǔ)為某品牌一款智能手機(jī)寫一篇促銷說(shuō)明．

必要性	手機(jī)是人們聯(lián)系工具之一．
顏色	黑色和白色
功能	收發(fā)短信，照相，上1，下載音樂(lè)，瀏覽1頁(yè)…
其他	MP4、自選游戲…

注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：瀏覽 browse
Thanks for choosing our smart phones．As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
This product of us has many different functions to meet different needs，such as sending or receiving short messages．Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）Thus，you can take pictures whenever you like．What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）It can even bring you a flood of music and movies．Most importantly，it can be used as an MP4 as well as a computer game player．
As for colours，we offer you the choice between white and black．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于圖表類作文，根據(jù)提示信息請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示，用英語(yǔ)為某品牌一款智能手機(jī)寫一篇促銷說(shuō)明，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：必要性，顏色，功能等 2、圖表是文章的總體框架，要在圖表的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：As we know眾所周知；get in touch with 與…取得聯(lián)系；Besides另外；Thus因此；What′s more而且；Most importantly更重要的是；  As for 至于，關(guān)于；as well as也，和
As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）
What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）

解答 Thanks for choosing our smart phones．As we know，mobile phones have become the most important way of communication，with which we can get in touch with each other wherever and whenever we are．（高分句型一）
       This product of us has many different functions to meet different needs，such as sending or receiving short messages．Besides，you won′t take pains to carry your camera any more，for the mobile phone itself has one．（高分句型二）Thus，you can take pictures whenever you like．What′s more，with the function of surfing the Internet，it allows you to browse web pages and download what you want．（高分句型三）It can even bring you a flood of music and movies．Most importantly，it can be used as an MP4  as well as a computer game player．
      As for colours，we offer you the choice between white and black．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．