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【題目】書面表達

假定你是李華，計劃寒假找份兼職工作。下面的招聘廣引起了你的注意，請根據(jù)要點（箭頭所指內容）寫一封申請信。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可適當增加細節(jié)使行文連貫；

3. 開頭已經給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp.

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Yours

LiHua

Answer 1

【答案】

Possible versions:

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I’m very interested in this position and I think my personality and experience will qualify me for the job.

To begin with, I gain much experience of working with children from my part-time job as a babysitter. Besides, I have been a helpful assistant for both my English teacher and my classmates. More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England. I will be available for the work on evenings and weekends and can start working from the end of this term. I would really appreciate it if you could give me this opportunity.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I am quite interested in this position. I am outgoing, energetic, well-organized, and responsible; and most importantly, I love working with children! In the past two years, as a monitor in my class, I have proved myself to be an excellent helper to my teachers. I speak fluent English, which enables me to help native English teachers communicate freely and effectively with students in an English-only environment.

I will soon have a three-week winter vacation, so I have no problem working evenings and weekends. I can start working from the end of this month. I would be pleased to assist both the teachers and students in this challenging and rewarding environment.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：假定你是李華，計劃寒假找份兼職工作。下面的招聘廣引起了你的注意，請根據(jù)要點（箭頭所指內容）寫一封申請信。這是一篇明顯的提綱作文，就是把文章的情景和內容要求分成塊，以條目的形式列出以進行寫作�？忌�在審題的時候應該注意審要求、審文體、審人稱、審時態(tài)。題文已經告知要求，那么文體應為書信文體，即介紹主要行程；又根據(jù)“你是李華” 寫作時即用第一人稱“我”，即李華；時態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時即可或一般將來時。考生在寫作時應該選擇自己最熟悉、最有把握的詞語、句型，將要點逐條表達出來。表達時應該綜合運用所掌握的知識，避開生僻的詞匯，并克服母語的干擾，按照英語的習慣方式，用地道的英語表達出來，力求做到語言準確無誤。然后根據(jù)要點選詞組句，然后按照篇章結構連句成篇。

【亮點說明】本文語言凝練，論點鮮明，條理層次清晰。文章第一段就開門見山介紹自己想應聘的愿望。第二段具體介紹了自己的情況，第三段表達自己的愿望。文章使用了插入語To begin with首先，more importantly更重要的是；which引導的非限制性定語從句More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England.（更重要的是，我會流利地說英語，這能夠幫助我和那些來自英國本地的工作者一起工作）；固定句型的靈活應用I have no problem working evenings and weekends.（我在周末或晚上工作沒問題）。高級短語和結構：be available for便于，qualify for因……而稱職。最后一句使用look forward to doing sth期待做某事，給文章一個完美的結束。