Question

【題目】隨著老齡化問題的日趨嚴(yán)重，空巢老人越來越多，有的老人呆在家里無所事事，感到空虛寂寞。請你向“China Daily”報社專欄寫一封關(guān)于讓這些老年人歡度老年時光的建議信。

注意：1、至少提兩條以上建議；

2、開頭語與結(jié)束語已給出，不計入總次數(shù)。詞數(shù)不少于120；

3、不能使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

空巢老人(empty nester)

Dear editor,

Sincerely yours,

Wan Ming

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear editor，

As the aging population is becoming larger and larger, the problem of the empty nesters is getting more and more serious.

I think they had better join in some outdoor activities，such as climbing mountains，playing Taiji,. They can also take up some hobbies like gardening or playing chess. Perhaps they can keep a pet like a dog or a cat. And I think that what is the most important for then is to make some friends with the people of their age，so that they can keep each other in company and share their experiences and happiness. Having friends means that they can have someone to talk to so that you won't feel lonely and depressed.

In my opinion, these suggestions may be helpful to them. I hope all the empty nesters will have a happy old life in future.

Wang Min

【解析】

試題解析：這是一篇書信寫作。主要根據(jù)當(dāng)今中國空巢老人的現(xiàn)象從而向人們提出一些讓老年人可以歡度老年時光的建議來進(jìn)行寫作，題目已經(jīng)給定大致內(nèi)容，寫作時要注意適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容，以保證文章的連貫性。文章第一段簡要介紹了空巢老人當(dāng)前的現(xiàn)狀，第二段對于這一問題給出自己的建議，第三段表示自己對此的期望。文章內(nèi)容結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，條理清楚。并且使用了動名詞作主語等句型使文章內(nèi)容更加的生動形象，唯一不足的是在第二段講述自己的建議時，句型過于單一，并且重復(fù)使用I think等讓人覺得有些枯燥，但盡管如此，對于大量詞組和短語如take up，keep a pet，keep sb in company等的使用卻使文章顯得更加高級，可以稱得上是一篇佳作。