Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三(1)班學(xué)生李華。請你根據(jù)以下四幅圖，給21世紀(jì)英文報寫一封稿件，介紹上周你班同學(xué)邀請一位常年在學(xué)校附近拉二胡的老人參加校藝術(shù)節(jié)的過程。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于60;

2. 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

提示詞：拉二胡 play the erhu

Last week, a special guest was invited to our annual school art festival.

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Answer 1

【答案】Last week, a special guest was invited to our annual school art festival. He was an elderly man we would see playing the erhu near our school every day. His melody was incredibly beautiful, but couldn’t get any attention from the rush-hour passers-by. It was a pity. How amazing it would be if his music could be appreciated!

There came a chance. When discussing what to present in our art festival, we all agreed to invite him to join us. Receiving our invitation, he could hardly hide his excitement and eagerness. We were all expecting his stage performance.

The big day finally arrived. When he played under the spotlights, all of us were mesmerized by his gorgeous music. As he finished, thunderous applause echoed around the auditorium. Wearing a broad smile, he repeatedly expressed his gratitude for being offered a stage to show his talent.

From this experience, I learned that, to the people like the elderly man what really matters is not sympathy but more attention or appreciation, which will bring them love and warmth and brighten their lives.

【解析】

這是一篇看圖作文，要求考生根據(jù)四幅圖片內(nèi)容，適當(dāng)拓展，寫一篇記敘文，記錄上周同學(xué)們邀請一位常年在學(xué)校附近拉二胡的老人參加校藝術(shù)節(jié)的故事。

作為平時練習(xí)較少的看圖作文題型，此次書面表達(dá)有一定難度，應(yīng)特別注意“審題”。

（一）審清題干，解讀圖片：

本次寫作的審題重點(diǎn)自然是四幅圖片，但也應(yīng)注意題干中“上周你班同學(xué)邀請一位常年在學(xué)校附近拉二胡的老人參加校藝術(shù)節(jié)的過程”這一關(guān)鍵的概括性提示。

結(jié)合題干來解讀圖片的內(nèi)容，第一幅圖描繪的是學(xué)校附近常年有一位老人在拉二胡，“我”經(jīng)常路過；第二幅圖描繪的是在藝術(shù)節(jié)招募演出人員的時候，同學(xué)們想起了這位老人，并進(jìn)行了討論；第三幅圖描繪的是同學(xué)們?nèi)ソo老人發(fā)邀請函，老人喜笑顏開；第四幅圖描繪的是老人上臺參加了藝術(shù)節(jié)的展演，臺下同學(xué)們?yōu)樗�鼓掌�?/span>

（二）適當(dāng)拓展，豐富內(nèi)容：

圖片只是提供了故事的基本內(nèi)容和脈絡(luò)，作為一篇記敘文，豐富詳實(shí)的內(nèi)容細(xì)節(jié)需要考生發(fā)揮合理的想象進(jìn)行展開寫作。例如：平日里老人拉二胡的水平；同學(xué)們討論邀請老人時的具體想法；老人收到邀請函后的具體反應(yīng)；老人上臺演奏當(dāng)天的氛圍和效果；老人演出之后向同學(xué)們表達(dá)的感激和感想；此次邀請帶給“我”的所思所感；等等。這些都是可以適當(dāng)拓展的要點(diǎn)，應(yīng)選擇其中一部分進(jìn)行展開，注意有的放矢，詳略得當(dāng)，不可面面俱到。

進(jìn)行故事細(xì)節(jié)的充實(shí)豐富之后，考生應(yīng)注意遣詞造句的問題。記敘文的寫作講究故事脈絡(luò)的清晰，應(yīng)多使用連接詞或時間狀語從句，清晰地展示出時間的先后順序。