Question

【題目】假如你是某中學的學生Tom。前不久，你參加了全國英語演講比賽并獲得一等獎。請用英語給�？瘜懸黄�文章，談?wù)勀愕捏w會。內(nèi)容主要包括：

1．付出才有回報；

2．收獲自信和友誼；

3．感激之情。

注意 1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；

3．開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago，I have a lot to share with you．______________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago, I have a lot to share with you.

Firstly，I feel really delighted that I’ve won the first prize in the competition , which makes me understand the true meaning of the proverb “No pains,no gains”. Besides, I’ve established the friendship with students from all over our country, from whom I’ve learned a lot.. More importantly, taking this competition has enabled me to overcome my fear of speaking in public, thus, developing my self-confidence. Additionally, I owe many thanks to my teachers and judges, without whose help I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.

To sum up, I will always treasure this meaningful and memorable experience.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于提綱作文，根據(jù)提示信息來談?wù)勛约?/span>參加全國英語演講比賽并獲得一等獎的體會。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確要點就是主要內(nèi)容。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。本文寫作時可以按照提示的三個方面的內(nèi)容進行介紹。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時和現(xiàn)在完成時。 以第一人稱為主。4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如which，from whom 和without whose help三個定語從句，還有taking this competition 和thus, developing my self-confidence2個動詞的-ing形式做主語和狀語以及without whose help I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.虛擬語氣。此外，文章還使用了諺語No pains,no gains和短語如in public, owe to等。Besides，More importantly，Additionally和 To sum up,的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。