Question

8．假定你是李華，Tom是你的美國(guó)好友，他三年前來(lái)過(guò)你所在的城市．最近他寫(xiě)信詢(xún)問(wèn)你所在城市的變化．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給他寫(xiě)一封回信．
要點(diǎn)：1．謝謝他的來(lái)信；
2．列舉城市的一些變化；
3．歡迎他再次來(lái)玩．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Tom，
Thank you for your letter．Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）First，the environment is increasingly pleasant．Most high-pollution industries have been moved out of the city．It is now a new city with lots of flowers and trees．What's more，the transportation is more convenient．We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）Now it has been open to the public．I wish you could pay a visit again and we could have fun in the park．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息 Tom是你的美國(guó)好友，他三年前來(lái)過(guò)你所在的城市．最近他寫(xiě)信詢(xún)問(wèn)你所在城市的變化．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給他寫(xiě)一封回信．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：謝謝他的來(lái)信；列舉城市的一些變化；歡迎他再次來(lái)玩．  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：Over the past three years在過(guò)去的三年里；What's more而且；pay a visit參觀，拜訪；have fun玩的高興
Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）
We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
      Thank you for your letter．Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）First，the environment is increasingly pleasant．Most high-pollution industries have been moved out of the city．It is now a new city with lots of flowers and trees．What's more，the transportation is more convenient．We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
       I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）Now it has been open to the public．I wish you could pay a visit again and we could have fun in the park．
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．