Question

16．假定你是李華，你的美國筆友Johnson來信說他因對父母說謊而受到嚴厲批評，因此他情緒低落．請你用英語給他寫一封回信，主要內容包括：
1．進行安慰；
2．指正錯誤；
3．給出建議．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Johnson，
I'm sorry to hear that you feel depressed now．Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
As a high school student，it's wrong for you to lie to your parents．We have been taught to be honest since we were very young．We should behave honestly and be ourselves in daily life．In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）In a word，don't make up any excuse and lie to your parents．Ihope you can feel better and come back to the normal life．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你是李華，你的美國筆友Johnson來信說他因對父母說謊而受到嚴厲批評，因此他情緒低落．請你用英語給他寫一封回信，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：進行安慰；指正錯誤；給出建議  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：feel depressed感到沮喪；lie to向…撒謊；In addition另外；get into trouble惹上麻煩；In a word總之；make up 編造，組成
Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Johnson，
      I'm sorry to hear that you feel depressed now．Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
      As a high school student，it's wrong for you to lie to your parents．We have been taught to be honest since we were very young．We should behave honestly and be ourselves in daily life．In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）In a word，don't make up any excuse and lie to your parents．I hope you can feel better and come back to the normal life．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．