Question

假定你是李華，正在一所英國(guó)學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)暑假課程，遇到一些困難，希望得到學(xué)校輔導(dǎo)中心(Learning Center)的幫助。根據(jù)學(xué)校規(guī)定，你需書面預(yù)約，請(qǐng)按下列要點(diǎn)寫一封信：
1. 本人簡(jiǎn)介；2. 求助內(nèi)容； 3. 約定時(shí)間；
4. 你的聯(lián)系方式(Email: lihua@1236.com; Phone:12345678)
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右； 2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫；
3. 信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I’m Li Hua, a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university. I’m writing to ask for help. I came here last month and found my courses interesting. But I have some difficulty with note-taking, and I have no idea of how to use the library. I was told the Learning Center provides help for students and I’m anxious to get help from you. I have no class on Tuesday mornings and Friday afternoons. Please let me know which day is OK with you. You may email or phone me. Here are my email address and phone number: lihua@1236.com; 12345678
Look forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)是要求寫一封信進(jìn)行預(yù)約。對(duì)書信這種寫作題材同學(xué)們非常熟悉，而且寫作內(nèi)容貼近學(xué)生生活，所以不會(huì)感覺(jué)無(wú)話可說(shuō)。不過(guò)在寫作時(shí)要注意對(duì)本人簡(jiǎn)介、求助內(nèi)容、約定時(shí)間和聯(lián)系方式等要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行陳述時(shí)，要發(fā)揮想象力，適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)；而且還要選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞以使文章內(nèi)容連貫，上下銜接自然。在時(shí)態(tài)方面，可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。此外本文是向輔導(dǎo)中心尋求幫助，所以要注意語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔明了，語(yǔ)氣委婉客氣。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔明了。作者用簡(jiǎn)單流暢的語(yǔ)言表述了自己寫信的目的，而且對(duì)要點(diǎn)的陳述簡(jiǎn)潔明了，條理清晰。文中出現(xiàn)的高級(jí)詞匯have difficulty with 和I have no idea of …，以及同位語(yǔ)a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university.并列句But I have some difficulty with note-taking, and I have no idea of how to use the library.和賓語(yǔ)從句Please let me know which day is OK with you.的使用都顯示了作者對(duì)語(yǔ)言很強(qiáng)的運(yùn)用能力，成為了文章的亮點(diǎn)。